HELP with my ESSAY!

College Essays
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<p>Hello! I'm a prospective undergraduate student trying to shoot for schools like Bryn Mawr, Haverford, Bucknell, Temple, Pennstate, and Ursinus. Haverford and Bucknell probably would be a slight reach. Most part of my application is finished except for my essay. I wrote an essay but I need people to help me with it. Please read it and revise/comment on it! Tell me your email or I can just send it to your account for college confidential. Thank you so much! Hope to get some interesting feedbacks!</p>