<p>It was mandatory for UC but optional for UPenn. I just changed it a little for Penn.</p>
<p>I think its pretty good. Anyone else want to judge?</p>
<p>I’ll check it out.</p>
<p>I need emails bc it is too long for a private message</p>
<p>I’ll be glad to read it for you.</p>
<p>whats your email ilikebananas?</p>
<p>i’ll take a look. PMed you my email. did you modify the UC uncommon essay into the penn page 217 one?</p>
<p>yes i did lol</p>
<p>-Your story’s a powerful one, that nicely answers their prompt.
-I really liked that closing paragraph, especially the line about how no grade or test can measure your strength of character.
-Not really a big deal, but I thought you could’ve explained a little more who Jesse was, and why you felt it was important to do right by him. I’ve no idea how a college admissions guy would see it, but that’s just how I felt as a reader. It was something I wanted to know more about.</p>
<p>Overall I think you have a winner, best of luck.</p>
<p>Thanks alot kingjustinian.
Good Luck to you as well!</p>