how can I make this rags to riches soccer essay better? (applying to Wesleyan ED II)

College Essays
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<p>anyone want to read my rags to riches (American Dream?) soccer essay? it's a good motivational read and will inspire all. PM me</p>

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<p>ill read it</p>

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<p>PM’ed it to you</p>

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<p>I’ll look at it as well if you want. I’m not applying there, and I finished my common app essay already.</p>