<p>I am trying to write about my first encounter with an egg (a regular chicken egg). We used to be extremely poor and could not afford to buy eggs, so when I first saw it in my neighbors refrigerator, I was amazed and regarded it as a treasure. It started to represent everything that I had ever earned for and it altered the way I see the life. It also changed how i measure progress. It is definitely not a usual essay topic but do you think I can make this work? Please don't make fun of me because my family could not afford an egg. Thanks</p>
<p>It sounds like an extremely viable topic, because it’s interesting to focus on an object as small and simple as an egg, and also because the egg reveals your background and your goals. </p>
<p>You might even want to delete this topic. People on this site WILL do anything to get in to college, including stealing your ideas.</p>
<p>Why is it that none of your relatives or even your grocery store offered you opportunities to view eggs?</p>
<p>And what kind of protein did your family find that was cheaper than eggs?</p>
<p>^ how about a can of beans? seriously, he doesn’t need you to pompously question his situation.</p>
<p>Haha you were too poor to buy eggs. Jeez. </p>
<p>Nah, I’m just kidding but you need to be careful with this topic lest it come off as too contrived or artificial.</p>
<p>^^we found things that were cheaper than egg for protein and I am not going to go down the list of how many things are cheaper. Yes, maybe nothing can replace some proteins but you should not be surprised that there are billions out there with insufficient protein intake.I was one of them and I was extremely skinny, I still am</p>
<p>and no, I did not go to grocery stores because most places that sold eggs were remote. I did not do shopping as you can guess. Do not imagine that I had huge Kroger or wall mart somewhere in radius of thousands of miles. Stop thinking from your narrow minded perspective and dont explain things in terms of you and how you have lived. The world is much greater than your life experience.</p>
<p>choklit, what was ornate or self-important about my questions? By the way, a dozen eggs cost a buck in 1990 according to this site:
[1990s</a> Flashback-Economy / Prices****](<a href=“http://www.1990sflashback.com/1990/Economy.asp]1990s”>1990s Flashback-Economy / Prices )</p>
<p>And stanford09 (funny name for someone just applying to college…), you have no idea how I have lived, so don’t jump to conclusions. I certainly didn’t. I hope you write about your egg and I hope that all of the admissions people have had exactly your background so that none of them have the same questions I do.</p>
<p>^^^ THATS IN THE UNITED STATES !..YEs of course you have an argument if we hold everything to American standards form 90s, 80s, or even 50s. My father left around 50 cent equivalent a day on top of piano, every day, and thats what my mother had to use. Yes, I bet she got very creative trying to come up with something. I dont want to go into details, its humiliating.</p>
<p>PS. Im not applying to college right now. I will do it transfer.</p>
<p>Oh, right, you were waitlisted according to your post: "… it was the same for the rest of the schools I was waitlisted at. "</p>
<p>Yes, I know that the price of eggs was for the US. I did jump to the conclusion that you were applying to colleges in the US and that your essay might be read by folks who were in the US when you first discovered eggs. In the US, you can buy half a dozen eggs, by the way. Given the possible backgrounds of your readers, you might benefit from sharing with them details so that your topic doesn’t seem artificial (as another person here warned).</p>
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<p>Am I a horrible person if I laughed out loud at this?</p>
<p>It’s not that I don’t believe you (per say) it’s just that dude; c’mon! Never seen an egg? Putting all your hopes and dreams in the first egg you see? Even now after two decades of existence that egg being the essence of your being?..lol.</p>
<p>But no, in all seriousness I don’t think it’s the best topic.</p>
<p>A) Bluntly, it sells your poverty; not yourself. I don’t really see how this topic gives an idea of who you are. Do you really need that “egg” premise? It’s not particularly grabbing, it’s blatant, and I don’t see how it adds to what you really seem to want to show (your vision of life, your struggles, etc.)</p>
<p>B) It lays it on a bit thick, don’t you think? It’s a sob story. “I’m poor; let me in” is not a message that will get you in. Showcasing that you’re an amazing and strong individual despite your financial background (which will be showcased through the schools you went to, your parent’s income, etc…) is a much more appealing sale. </p>
<p>C) It’s a sob story that may very well be written off as BS- even if true. It requires a stretch of the imagination and full trust on the reader’s part (which you don’t have with adcoms). eople in Etiopia eat eggs! Refugee camp people eat eggs! That guy that was raised by wolves ate eggs. Lizards in the Sahara eat eggs!..At least the guy from Oprah stuck to the believable.</p>
<p>*** Keep in mind that this is completely subjective; some people get into Harvard writing about their garbage can. I’ve seen it. If you feel like this is the best thing you can write and that it represents you best then power to you. This opinion is just based on what you gave us here.</p>
<p>Stanford, in some parts of the world, people who don’t even have pianos to lay their 50 cents upon (every day!) have been known to own a chicken.</p>
<p>well, we did not have a chicken, we did not live in a village. In any case, I dont see the reason why I even started this thread. Theres no way I can ask people to judge something based on a little vague paragraph I provided. I would suggest that we close this matter. Its never too intelligent to consult an online forum on an essay thats supposed to be your own and real.</p>
<p>…I think you’re safe from plagiarism with that one.</p>
<p>Good luck with the essay regardless!</p>
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Dude, I just finished my college essay. Here are the first couple of sentences; what do you think?</p>
<p>The first thing that I caught a glimpse of when I stealthily opened my neighbor’s refrigerator door in order to pilfer sustenance for my impoverished and starving family was a pale, luminescent orb . Framed by the dull glow of the 8-watt bulb, it beckoned to me coyly, beseeching me to nourish myself with its protein-rich innards.</p>
<p>^ hahahaa, thats funny. No, I dont think I would ever get that sentimental.llol</p>
<p>Stanford09, I don’t doubt that your story’s true but Lionheaded is pretty accurate, it’ll sound very contrived, triumphant and could easily sound immature to be glorifying an egg and your huge epiphany in life. Good essays are sometimes funny, they are usually nuanced and usually sound mature. It seems like you’ve taken the topic directly infront of you and tried to form some fancy metaphor. even if you are very passionate about it, the essay is all about how you are perceived. We tell people to write to from the heart, because that usually makes for a better essays. </p>
<p>If an essay is good though it really doesn’t matter where it came from, and if an essay is bad, again, it really doesn’t matter where it came from. You are not writing it for a sense of catharsis or to tell a boy/girlfriend about yourself, you are writing it to get into college. So think about it from the ad-coms perspective rather than yours, they’re judging your personality, your writing style, and your experiences from that essay. Feel free to experiment with the topic, and send over a draft, I’d be happy to critique it for you. But whatever you do, don’t get tied down to this or any topic, you need to really try a few topics before you can gain perspective on the best one.</p>