How does my UC essay sound?

Applying to College
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<p>Is the anyone who will read my UC essay for the prompt for all applicants. If anyone replies yes I will PM it to you. I would really appreciate if anyone would do this for me, I am kind of new to this college essay business.</p>

<p>The prompt is </p>

<p>Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>

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<p>I shall try my best, do you mind if I take a day or two?</p>

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<p>that is find, anything would help</p>

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<p>can i have your email, it wont let me PM</p>