How to Improve APUSH Writing?

In my APUSH class I have not been able to break the A border on writing assessments such as the DBQ and FRQs. I’m a fairly adept writer, but historical writing seems to be a weak point of mine. I recently wrote a DBQ that received around a B+ (attached below) and I would appreciate any feedback or tips for improvement you guys have to offer. You can give it a grade, give me tips, or anything of the sort. Thank you for any responses.

Prompt: How did the United States perceive its position in the world after WWII and what actions did it take to shape this perception?

Hi Skarlo.
I’m also taking APUSH right now and a bit nervous. In class, I’ve got A’s on my DBQ’s, but I don’t know how that’ll translate to the ap exam. Here are some pointers that I use for my DBQ.

  1. There's no need to have more than 1 sentence (Thesis) in your intro. The rubric only gives one point for the thesis, so anything other than the thesis is a waste of time that you could use on improving your essay.
  2. You want to analyze every single document (or 6/7) by using at least one of HAPPY. Use your documents as evidence for your essay, but don't summarize what is already stated.

H- historical context
A- audience
P- perspective
P- purpose
Y- whY is this document important

  1. Provide at least 9 outside evidence for each paragraph (4-5 for each paragraph).
  2. You want to tie all the evidence together and how it contributes to your main ideas in your thesis.
  3. For the conclusion, I literally rewrite my thesis and put in summation in front as the rubric doesn't grade your thesis.
  4. Since synthesis is one whole point, I usually tie the topic to a past or modern event. Remember to give specific points about this one event and how it relates to the topic.
  5. Remember that this is an APUSH essay, not an essay for your lit class. You don't have to be a great writer to get a perfect score on the essay. Focus on concisely relaying your evidence to the reader and how they relate with each other.

Overall, your essay is pretty good. I would focus on tying all your evidence together to support your ideas in your thesis. I would expand more in your synthesis by saying what measures the US took to fight against communism during the Cold War.

Good luck!

Great tips! I’m nervous for the DBQ both in class and on the exam.

@sharkshockey
Thank for the detailed and very helpful response!
Yeah I definitely see your point about it being a historical essay rather than a lit one, and how I should focus on points on the rubric rather than style, tying my evidence together.

For your point about HAPPY, do you mean the analysis for each piece of evidence should relate to one of the letters at least?
And what do you mean by synthesis; do you mean analysis?

@Skarlo
You have to use one of HAPPY for analysis for each document you use.
Also, for synthesis, I’m talking about your conclusion paragraph where you connect your documents to a previous or current situation (can be similar or contradict). If you look at the dbq rubric, this is the easiest way to get that final point.