How's my USC short answers?

College Essays
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prompt:Describe something outside of your intended academic focus about which you are interested in learning.

For this one I state how i am an animal enthusiast and would used to binge watch animal planet. After saving puppies stranded under the patio, I though i’ve found my destiny as a little girl. For the conclusion I said that i’ve never quite let go of the dreams of becoming a veterinarian or at least to know more about animals

prompt:Describe how you plan to pursue your academic interests at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections.

  • i plan to major art practice with pre-professional emphasis on teaching, and minor music with piano and join school orchestra with cello.
  • i gave some background about how my life has been revolving around art and music, and that my artworks are inspired by the texture and mood of the music I practice everyday. and how after teaching my little sister and cousin, i became interested in promoting passion through teaching
  • for my conclusion I said i'm drawn to usc flexibility in ba art that allows me to study multiple art forms which allows me to search for my artistic style and career path that best fits me. and also the pre-professional emphasis will allow me to sharpen my teaching skill while being able to focus on art at the same time. And lastly i mentioned a bit about participating in thornton school of music.

is this good? for the academic interest essay, should i take out my background? and for first essay, is the saving puppies idea “childish”?

I’m a bit frustrated because my brain is fried right now and these essays are written with the ideas that first came into my mind. I also think my essays are boring? I’m just feeling hopeless right now…

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I think you sound genuine. That is a breath of fresh air.

When you speak of the two things in your life which you thought may have given you the vision and motivation to devote your life to these things - the instance of saving the puppies, and instructing your little sister and cousin in the arts, you are giving a real peek inside to who you are, and what has moved you along the path to now.

Don’t change these instances where you specifically relate why you hold your specific interests and passions (especially that which describes how you intend to pursue your academic interests on their campus). As briefly described here, these statements could not be written by anyone but you.

One thing I do not know if you have done in your essays, or if you have come to see and realize this in any way, is speak to the way that both art/instruction and puppy love (smile) have been very successfully used to help people heal and regroup, regain a sense of the vital connectivity to other living beings, in both hospital, nursing and teaching environments.

I would submit that something in you seeks to both teach and heal, and perhaps someday you will combine these seemingly different and diverging areas of interest which have so moved you.

If you find that you have met some of the other thresholds for admission to USC and this is the only thing holding you up, you’re ready. Rest for tonight, and wake and think of how you want to clean up your essays, reread, breathe, then press submit.

Good luck to you.