I love you. And I'll grade back

<p>I know many of you are prepping for your own very important tests. But grading there two, no even one, would mean so much to me!</p>

<p>LINK TO MY OTHER ESSAY: <a href="http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/1466949-grade-my-essay.html%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/1466949-grade-my-essay.html&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

<p>Do small decisions often have major consequences?</p>

<p>Small actions can catalyst into major events. One fail in a class can lead to horrendous results. One gunshot lead to a monumental war. And one "fun night" can change one's life forever. Several examples that show this belief can be found in experience, literature, and history. </p>

<p>To start off, small actions can lead to life changing effects. In high school, especially, colleges focus closely on one's grades, GPA, rank, etc. However, for most students, they rarely even think of the idea of college while still being a little 9th grader. They think that college coney look at upperclassmen years. But that is definitely wrong. Being a high schooler, I know many people who clacked off their freshman and sophomore years. Now two years before college, they are scrambling to find grade-lifting, grade-improving classes. But the damage is done already. This small action of slacking is causing many ambitious teenagers to slid off the charts of their dream colleges. </p>

<p>Another example can be found in the George Orwell's book, 1984. Main character, Winston Smith, is oppressed by the despotic government and wants to break free from its limited actions. So he did something extremely illegal and unheard of: he had intercourse with a lady he loved. In this one seemingly innocuous action, Smith is actually breaking multiple laws set by the AirStrip One government. Although he and Julia continued their secret romance for a very long time, they soon got caught. This one simple love affair turned into a life-changing (literally and figuratively) for both Winston Smith and his lover, Julia.</p>

<p>As demonstrated in the novel the Great Gatsby, Jay Gatsby also committed a tiny decision that would soon kill him. Gatsby had a very secretive life. No one knew who, what, and how he did everything he claims to do. However many people did see him constantly throwing lavish, opulent parties. After acquainting and reuniting with his lost love, Daisy, they suddenly decided to run off like they had done as teenagers. In the beginning, readers view this as an exciting, lucky, optimistic event for the recluse Winston Smith. But later on, they learn that this secret affair caused Jay Gatsby and Daisy to split forever AND the main protagonist being murdered. </p>

<p>The last example can be found in the cause that started the Revolutionary War: the shot heard 'round the world. Basically one hot July day, a riot started in Lexington, Pennsylvania with arguments and pushing. A british officer accidentally opened fire and killed one civilian. This small shot erupted a hung war that costed many lives for both the British and the Americans/Colonists and lasted for quite a long time (around 5 years). Small actions like that gunshot by a frazzled Red Coat guard led to one of the most watershed event in American history.</p>

<p>After a close analysis of books, life, and history, it is obvious that small decisions can lead to huge consequences. Who knew one F can mean the difference between Harvard and a state school? Who knew one wounded man can mean a war or no war? Who knew? Indeed, small actions can certainly stimulate large, momentous changes.</p>

<p>Over in all, it is waay better than the one I read for you before.
Your intro is really nice, and conclusion is fine.
But you still have some work to do on how to relate your examples to the topic. especially examples 1984 and the Great Gatsby… They are somehow related but not “going deep into the question” ;)</p>

<p>And dude, you wrote 4 examples in 25 minutes?!??! If yes, then I am officially impressed :stuck_out_tongue:
But if you have time to write 4, then I suppose if you take the time to write 3 well developed more related examples, you’ll on your way to an 11/12. :D</p>

<p>(word of advice, you might wanna go to some essay threads, grade the OP’s essay, then make him/grade yours back :D… More efficient than the endless wait you know) </p>

<p>Oh yeah I think this one may take like a 9 or 10 I guess
hope that helps :D</p>

<p>Thanks! And yes I was brainstorming and BAM I came up with 4 topics. And I thought I might as well write all 4.</p>

<p>in 25 minutes?!?!</p>