I need an opinion on my YourSpace...

<p>I'm applying to Vassar EDII and I have a couple options I'm working on for my YourSpace. This is the only one I have completed, but I've gotten mixed emotions on whether it's appropriate/good or not. Would anybody mind taking a look for me?</p>

<p>Vassar</a> YourSpace - It's Still Rock & Roll to Me - YouTube</p>

<p>I kept waiting for it to go somewhere, but it didn’t. I think the idea is okay, but you need to speed it up considerably. I’m not sure what you want it to say in the overall context of your app.</p>

<p>Okay, thank you! I’ll try shortening it up and adding some more relevant content.</p>

<p>I added some new stuff to the video to give it more purpose. I put in clips of me holding up signs that say, respectively:
“I love Vassar…”
“more than I love rock n’ roll.”
“And that’s saying something.”</p>

<p>I hope that helps! Also, would anybody be willing to look over my essay? I haven’t done any edits yet but I’m looking for an outside opinion. I haven’t made enough posts to PM so if you give me your email I’ll send it along!</p>