I need suggestions for my UC essays. Please HELP!

<p>I'm a potential junior transfer student, and so my first prompt is as follows: What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field — such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities — and what you have gained from your involvement.</p>

<p>My intended major is philosophy, and I'm basically going to talk about how I've seen terrible things happen to really close family members, and have also seen wonderful things happen to terrible people (I'm not going to say it quite so negatively, but that's the general idea). Seeing these seemingly-senseless things helped me realize at a young age that life is not fair, nor is it black and white, and it made me want to search for the meaning of life (again, not the exact idea, but a general gist). So here's my problem: When I read other threads on here about opening lines and hooks, it seems as if everyone is using a creative hook, as if they are telling a story. However, I can't really write about my topic as a story, and so I'm worried that my essay won't be what the admissions officers are looking for. So should I try to find a way to write about it creatively, or is it okay if it's more explanatory (without being boring of course)?</p>

<p>Also, for the second prompt, the basic idea of the question is "What is some accomplishment that's important to you? Why are you proud of it and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>

<p>So for this prompt I want to talk about how in high school, I was diagnosed with clinical depression and stopped caring about school, but then managed to turn myself around and graduate from high school at age 16 and work hard to finish two years of CC work in one year. Is this a good topic, or will it hurt me to mention not only that I was depressed, but that my grades kinda sucked? And would this one be better written about creatively, or narratively?</p>

<p>I really REALLY appreciate any help or feedback![:</p>

<p>yes for the secnd prompt, the topic is fine. seems like that subject is realy close to ur heart and if you care, then the reader will care .</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>Does anyone have suggestions for the first prompt?</p>

<p>bump</p>

<p>Sorry, I REALLY need help!</p>

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<p>Why not?</p>

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<p>Because I don’t really know how I would write about a general experience (questioning the world) in a story form. I mean, there wasn’t really a particular “Aha!” moment where I realized that I wanted to assess the things around me, so I don’t really know how I could express it as a story. Do you have any suggestions on how I could do this. I would really appreciate it. [:</p>

<p>the criminal won the lottery and became rich</p>

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<p>But didn’t you do exactly that at the start of the thread?</p>

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<p>You could flesh it out with details of your personal experience–the terrible things, the wonderful things, the realization(s), the searching you’ve done so far, the desire to do more. What would be wrong with that?</p>

<p>Hmm true. Okay, I’ll try to see if I can expand it and make it a story. Thank you! [:</p>