<p>i took it down thanksss</p>
<p>i’m not one of those editors who loves to edit essays but</p>
<p>you shouldn’t post your essay on CC. people may think you are plagiarizing when you send it to colleges. plus, others may even plagiarize your own essay. edit this post immediately (delete the essay) and PM the essay to those who are trustworthy (based on length on CC, number of posts, and whether they are applying this year or next or previous year. Go for the ones not applying this year, obviously). Most people here who have accounts are trustworthy but better to be safe than sorry (i hate that saying btw).</p>
<p>PS i liked that essay 
and second all of SMRSMR’s thoughts</p>
<p>Wow pretty good. I was somewhat uninterested as it seemed very formal up until the third or so paragraph. And there are a few grammar mistakes here and there, but overall it is a very strong essay! But I agree, take it down now!</p>