<p>I promise it will be very ego-boosting for you, because you can compare your essay to mine :D
If you're concerned about overlapping schools, the schools I'm applying to and haven't submitted my apps for yet are MIT, Princeton, UNC, and U Maryland; I can look objectively and without risk of idea thieving at any other school's essays :)</p>
<p>I’d be down to swap :).</p>
<p>Send yours over and I’ll send mine. I need my Pennsylvania one about the community critiqued.</p>
<p>i’ll trade pton for cornell</p>
<p>i’m down for exchanging. i need my notre dame one looked at</p>
<p>pm me anyone who wants to exchange.
including what schools are your applying to.</p>
<p>i’ll swap. need lots of help right now</p>
<p>Sorry for the delay!!! I got a little distracted haha. Go ahead and PM me your essays, I am PMing mine to you like right now.</p>
<p>I’ll read over yours too if you’re willing to give me feedback on mine.</p>
<p>i already submitted all mine. I’ll take critique yours if you want.</p>
<p>I can read yours if you want. I am already in college. Gdluck.</p>
<p>SMILEY YOUR INBOX IS FULL! I hope you see this.
I’m going to post my comments here, because there’s nothing too revealing. Everyone else can just look on and wonder ;)</p>
<p>This is a really cool topic! Well-written essay too 
Superfluous looking stuff:
“Ways of improving Bard constantly remains on my mind. In fact, I conceived the possibility of a debate club in the shower, the literary magazine while falling asleep and the talent show while jogging.” – although this is a cool note, I don’t think it adds at all to the main idea of the essay
Similar comments about the following paragraph; also, it’s normal to have to deal with scheduling conflicts, so overcoming those should already be implied in the fact that you organized the show.
You could probably also cut out the paragraph about Robotics, FIRST should already be listed in your activities section (or an attached resume), so colleges already know you won the competition and whatnot.</p>
<p>Random comments:
2nd paragraph, I think there needs to be a comma after “The Pen”
The “first” in First Robotics is an acronym, isn’t it? I’ve always seen it as “FIRST”
In the same paragraph, “Institute. it was”, I think you put a period instead of a comma by accident.
There could be a clearer transition from the robotics paragraph to the diversity paragraph.</p>
<p>Good luck! It sounds like you’re a really qualified applicant too, I’m sure you’ll have no problem getting into your top choices :)</p>
<p>I would love an edit exchange. My Pton essay is too risky, and I need a second opinion.</p>
<p>Okay, I finally got through my pile of essays to read haha! If you guys are up for it, I would love to swap still.
Mine is on its way to your 3 PM inboxes :)</p>
<p>Oh and I need to delete those comments but I can’t because I closed the page by accident. Dang, I hope I didn’t just unwittingly make a CC enemy… aw.</p>
<p>don’t worry. you didn’t unwittingly make an enemy. by the way, thanks for sending me your comments. I can read over your essay if you like cannary k.
thanks again for your comments too</p>