Importance of Short Answer on Common App-Extracurricular Activity?

<p>Okay so I had written a pretty long post about my situation with this but evidently CC is not my friend today because it logged me out upon posting.</p>

<p>A Shorter Version of What I Had Posted Before:</p>

<p>Basically I did not realize that the Short Answer part of the Writing section was supposed to be written in any sort of fluffy, sophisticated way. I interpreted the word "elaborate" in the prompt as "further explain your involvement with an activity." Needless to say, my short paragraph about my role on the tennis team is written very matter-of-factly and not at all in the anecdotal style that I've now seen others use.</p>

<p>My application has already been sent to several schools, including my ED Claremont McKenna (obviously pretty tough to get into for anyone who's heard of it). I just want to assess the potential damage done. Not sure if it's worth noting, but I generally am a decent writer (780 W SAT I). </p>

<p>So here is what I wrote. If I was "on the bubble" for admission, would this be bad enough to elicit a rejection? Honesty much appreciated. </p>

<p>"I've been playing tennis since I was seven years old. Outside of school, I often compete in USTA tournaments, practice in clinics, and take private lessons. I have also played as a singles player on my high school varsity team for three years, going
on four. I usually play second singles. As one of two varsity captains on my team, my main responsibilities are to lead drills, conduct fundraisers, and rally team spirit. My favorite memory of high school tennis up to this point was probably my team's advancement into the Division II State Championships during my freshman year. I think I love tennis because it allows me to compete independently for the benefit of something greater. I feel in control of my own fate in a single's match because I play to win by myself, but I also know that my team is depending on me. The pressure I feel during a match makes a subsequent victory feel incredible."</p>

<p>You can’t sugar coat tenis! While it might not be your best ever writing, you gave the college what they want to hear. Sure your ED is tough, but your writing won’t hurt you. That short answer is for dedication and commitment, which you have! I’m sure your common app essay was terrific, this won’t hurt your decision.</p>

<p>thank you for your reply :)</p>

<p>I don’t see anything wrong with this - it looks fine to me! A lot of times factual and to the point is a good thing, especially since there is limited space for the answer.</p>

<p>I hope so!</p>

<p>FWiW my D was told by her top choice to expand on either an EC which they might not be familiar with (making it up, say ‘jane’s kids’ which could then be a small local charity to mentor disadvantaged kids but not Big Brother/ Big Sister). Alternately, detail on your deep involvement in something if your ECs are all pretty basic. Worry not.</p>

<p>wow i’m actually really surprised that no one said anything negative</p>