Is my essay on topic?

Applying to College
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<p>Prompt:
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>

<p>I wrote about how my trip to Hawaii taught me valuable lessons that will allow me to increase my understanding of the world through pursuing knowledge. Is this on track with the prompt?</p>

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<p>Well…maybe a good idea, maybe not. If this was a luxury trip to Hawaii it may not be your best topic. If it was a mission trip to Moloki, the island with lepers, and you learned about this population, that could be interesting.</p>

<p>Bottom line is you’d have needed to dig deep to find cultural understanding and valuable lessons beyond how to hula in a typical trip to Hawaii.</p>