Is this sentence clear enough?

College Essays
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<p>In the section of the common app where you have to explain what have you been doing since you graduated from high school I included this sentence:</p>

<p>"I have been attending a “cram school” because my high school didn’t have enough emphasis on some subjects that are fundamental for my intended major (namely biology, organic chemistry and physics). "</p>

<p>Is it hard to understand? Awkward?</p>

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<p>It is very awkward. Also, state what you wanted to accomplish without bashing your high school: "I have been attending a "cram school" to explore biology, organic chemistry & physics in more depth" or something along those lines. Leave out the parenthetical.</p>

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<p>Thanks! I have a tendency to write that kind of rude sentences...I hope I can get rid of it.</p>