June 2010 Writing

<p>CONSOLIDATED LIST (non-experimental)
-please confirm, correct, improve, elaborate wherever you can
-Venus Williams section was experimental
-currently thinking there were 2 no errors</p>

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<p>IMPROVING SENTENCES (0/11)</p>

<p>ERROR IDENTIFICATION (14/18)
compared Jupiter’s weather to Earth — “Earth” should be “that of Earth”
Although …, but … — Although is redundant so answer is A
sister and I put our hand in lake — should be “hands”
three things were being compared and “more” was used — should be “most”
Stonehenge question — “has been” wrong tense
a woman who would have “went” to college — should be “would have gone”
women became a person in their own right — plurality mismatch on “a person”
… one …, you — pronoun inconsistency, “you” is the error
Number of something, …, “are growing” — should be “is growing”
intent about — should be “intent on”
enjoyed opera more than all types of performance — should be “all other types”
molars question – pay attention to
“That their works were criticized by famous artist who … no surprise to …” — no error
i got #29 (last of section) as no error. anyone remember the question? anyone confirm?</p>

<p>PARAGRAPH BASED (6/6)
In my case…
insert after the first sentence about scientists, i think #8
delete the sentence
“They also” purr when they are stressed
Cats purr when content; for example, my cat…</p>

<h2>“seems to be the one” –> “is certainly plausible” </h2>

<p>SECTION 10 (3/14)
Dinosaur question — term…,was coined in year #, though scientists knew.</p>

<h1>12 D “as a result of either”</h1>

<h2>Draconian question(#13) Fine as is. “as is indicated by…” A</h2>

<p>I believe there was some misplaced modifier as #28. Bla bla bla, wrong subject …
Can anyone confirm this?</p>

<p>There was one in the rewording sentences that’s subject, “disintegration of …”, had to be moved closer to the comma…</p>

<p>does anyone remember what the errors were in the sentence about Agassiz and the glaciers and the sentence about the petrified logs (these may have been experimental)?</p>

<p>^ That was experimental :p</p>

<p>strawber93, i think that was experimental
jollybjolly, can u elaborate a little?</p>

<p>What was the the answer to the question about their work being critiqued? The on that started with That? I put “that” as the error. Can anyone tell me if im wrong.</p>

<p>I put no error as did a few other people who posted earlier. But i don’t think anyone really knows for sure.</p>

<p>The best i can remember of the sentence (it was longer than this):
That the works of the novice artists were critiqued by the professional artist came as no surprise to them.</p>

<p>What do you think is wrong with “that”?</p>

<p>I put that. It just sounded very off.</p>

<p>the general construction of the sentence sounded a bit weird, but what could you have done with the word “that” specifically to make the sentence better grammatically?</p>

<p>^I am sure that the answer to that question is no error. “That” makes the clause act like a noun phrase. It works in the same way as “the fact that”: “the fact that they were critiqued came as no surprise to them.”</p>

<p>^does anybody remember if this was question #29, the last of the section?</p>

<p>What’s the usual score range for -4 and 10 essay?</p>

<p>Also, I put No Error for ‘that’ question as well.</p>

<p>I think it was. I was thinking of the fact that as the real answer. sigh</p>

<p>^according to a couple charts in the back of my BB, 4 wrong no blank 10 essay = 710</p>

<p>was the that… critiqued… question #29 (last error identification)?</p>

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low to mid-700s</p>

<p>^I second that question.</p>

<p>EDIT: Never mind.</p>

<p>we agreed that the question: “that the people got critqued didnt surprise them” was no error. was that #29 or a different question?</p>

<p>@usernamee I think it was #24 and #29</p>

<p>Do you remember the actual questions? One of them was about the critique.</p>