<p>i appreciate any help :D</p>
<p>Everyone necessarily has his own opinions and people love, by nature, to present their opinions and defend them. This gives them higher self-satisfaction. But from from history and from studied made by the National Behavior Research Center (NBRC), one can easily conclude that it’s important to ONLY consider the opinions of those who have experience in the field of interest. Doing so will help you come with the best solution and will save your time.
One remarkable example that demonstrates the importance of listening ONLY to those with experience is the Brazilian history. In 1933, Brazil was in its worst economical states; the income was 2.5% lower than the loans and it seemed that Brazil was not going to get any better. The government asked several economists for help. But the results weren’t highly successful because Brazil only asked unproficient economists for help since those wouldn’t need high payment. But everything changed when Brazil consulted the English economist, Steve White, to solve this problem. Although he was paid a huge amount of money, 7 million dollars, Mr. White was literary the hero of Brazil. By following his plan, Brazil was able to increase its annual income from 14 billion dollars to 200 billion dollars in 15 years and by 1959, it met all its loans.
Not only the economy stories, but also the researches support the thesis of this essay. In a study made by the NBRC where 100 high school teams tried to launch small businesses, it was found that those who only asked experts for help had income 4 times higher than those who considered the opinions of every single person. Nancy Daniel, a psychologist, in a trial to explain these results, say “experts have, usually, passed through different situations where they tested several possible solutions and discovered which solution would work the best.” According to Nancy, ordinary people aren’t usually aware of the consequences that may result from applying their opinions to the real life, that’s why the teams which only asked experienced people got better results.
It may be supposed that considering every single opinion will help people reach the best and most creative solution. But the Brazilian history as well as the studies of the NBRC demonstrates that experts can help you reach better results in shorter periods of time. If everyone and every company only ask those with experience, we will, for sure, witness major improvement in every single aspect in our life.</p>
<p>if possible, please write ur comments in this format:
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<p>Thanx for everyone. :D</p>
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