<p>So I am writing, as an alternative, the beginning of a story about how once I peed myself in a hotel. I believe that my story is well written and funny. I managed to write the word "pee" only once. I think this story may somehow stand out a bit but maybe its theme could be a problem. What do you think?</p>
<p>No…</p>
<p>Is there some way you could post or message it? Because without seeing it, many of us don’t know exactly what you’re talking about…</p>
<p>Oversharing is generally a bad idea.
See the following:</p>
<p><a href=“Opinion | Oversharing in Admissions Essays - The New York Times”>Opinion | Oversharing in Admissions Essays - The New York Times;
<p>Sounds strange.</p>
<p>Sounds funny to a 17 year old, but I doubt it is a story that makes an admissions person want to add you to their campus.</p>
<p>Yes, it could work, if well done, and you got the right admissions people reading and assessing it. You can also get someone who isn’t. It’s not a subject or word that works with a lot of assessors, so it’s a chance you take. When someone has a risky essay topic, I usually tell them to use a different essay for half their applications, so you split the risk, all other things equal.</p>
<p>I firmly believe that an interesting story that reveals something about you wins out over a bland-boring-overused topic. HOWEVER, in this case, I urge you to run it by an adult first, if you at all have time. Preferably not Mom or Dad who think anything you say/write is funny and cute. If the adult laughs, go with it. If not, rethink it.</p>
<p>Is the story still funny & coherent if u leave it out?</p>
<p>There was a specific incident where a girl who was thisclose to getting (according to the admissions officer) didn’t because her essay mentioned her peeing in her pants as a result of being too engrossed in an intellectual convo.
Point being, probably shouldn’t do it. </p>
<p>Humor can be good, but this topic is overly crude for a college essay. It doesn’t matter how you spin it - it’s always going to take away from a good essay in some way. Avoid.</p>
<p>@viewthroughkohl0 - yep - see the link I posted in reply #3 above - that’s the story about the girl writing about urinating on herself.
Didn’t end well.</p>
I know a current ND freshman and the opening line was about a stinky bathroom. Yes she understood it was a bit audacious but there was definitely a major point to it. Hoping the student won’t mind, but the house runner didn’t allow flushing until the greywater from the laundry was available, right here in a US suburb. It was to demonstrate the extreme frugality practiced. Sure it was a bit audacious and some wouldn’t think it appropriate, but there were quite a few college that did accept.