Mixed reviews on essay. Please help

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<p>I have an UC application essay prompt #2. I'm getting mixed reviews. From emotional, touching to dry and banal. </p>

<p>Can anyone help? I don't go on CC that much, please provide emails. I need it around this week since I need to make serious suggestions if its dry and banal.</p>

<p>Harsh critiques are welcome!</p>

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<p>ill read it</p>

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<p>PM it to me for a critique.</p>

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<p>sign me up ;) i'll read it</p>

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<p>pm me ill read it</p>