My SAT Prep Essay

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<p>I've been very worried about my SAT score so I decided to buy the CollegeBoard SAT Prep book. Only now do I realize that because school doesn't start in a month, there is no one to grade my essay. If any of you guys are willing to grade my essay or just read through it and give me headers/tips, I would very much appreciate it. (It is the first practice essay test on the CollegeBoard book)</p>

<p>Prompt:
Sometimes it is necessary to challenge what people in authority claim to be true. Although some respect for authority is, no doubt, necessary in order for any group or organization to function, questioning the people in charge --even if they are experts or leaders in their field-- makes us better thinkers. It forces all concerned to defend old ideas and decisions and to consider new ones. Sometimes it can even correct old errors in thought and put an end to wrong answers.</p>

<p>Assignment: Is it important to question the ideas and decision of people in positions of authority? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your proposition with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>My Response Essay:
Questioning actions of authority is frowned upon by some governments and is said to be "rebellion." But to question authority as citizens of the state is actually a necessity of the success of government. Are not those in authority human? Governments are consisted of people that make mistakes like the rest of us.</p>

<p>The United States of America was established by the questioning of government. The States had seen it illogical for a king in England to rule. Separated by a massive body of water, the North Atlantic Ocean, America and England were to worlds unlike in custom and interest. The early rebels knew they had to create a new system of government for America. They saw no reason for King George's extra charges on American affairs of tea and such. With much resent towards their ruler, King George, and his policies, the Americans drove away the British with each glorious battle. Each time they fired a musket they drew away from the unfit government.</p>

<p>The Civil Rights Movement was a series of peaceful rebellion against state laws of discrimination against the Colored. Those that had a darker skin tone were moved to the back of the bus, separated from the light-skinned, and had limited rights in society. Leaders such as Martin Luther King Jr. found it only right if the Colored protested, but with peaceful tactics. This was the first time in American History peaceful protests were used. With every sit-out and banner, the Colored raises awareness. They gained rights in society and was treated fairly.</p>

<p>Questioning acts of the government is what drives our country forward. It is the responsibility of The People to oversee government actions and decision. This is what created the United States and equal rights and for the Colored. To question the government establishes peace and health of society.</p>

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<p>Oh my heavens, never say “the Colored” again. I’m sure you picked up the term “colored” from somebody well-meaning, but it stopped being polite fifty years ago or more. “African-American” and “black” are both largely acceptable now, although different people will have different preferences about which is better. “Colored,” lower-case, was polite a long time ago but is not anymore. </p>

<p>“The Colored,” with the article and a capital C, was never polite. With the capitalization and especially the singular, it sounds like something from a BBC documentary about animals. “The lion, the peak predator of the savannah, rests in satisfaction for about two days after each successful hunt.” Never use any tone about race that makes it sound like you’re talking about a species of animal. Using plural will avoid this problem: African-Americans, blacks, or black people; here you could use African-American activists or some equivalent non-racial noun, for another example protesters. There is not a monolithic entity in America that is the Black, no more than there is the White. Instead there are black people and white people (and Asians, Latino/as, Native Americans/American Indians, and others) and using the plural indicates your awareness of that.</p>