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<p>The winter during my sixth grade year, I went on a trip that changed my life. I got the chance to travel to India with my family. Initially, I was reluctant to go because I would rather not waste my summer going to a country I did not know much about, but my mother convinced me otherwise, saying that it was good for me to see from where my family and heritage originates from.
When I arrived there, I saw so many homeless people wandering about on the streets. I knew that there was terrible poverty in India, but I could never fathom what I saw once I reached there. There were homeless people everywhere, children were forced to become beggars in order to get some money to feed themselves and their families. There were people sleeping on streets with trash bags wrapped around them as blankets. I remember not eating for the first few days I arrived there, because I felt so guilty. I have never felt so terrible in my entire life. There are so many people that promise to make a difference in the world, but they have never seen any of the terrible things that occur everywhere. That day, I vowed to myself that I would work hard in life, and grow up to be a successful person and help the poor. Six years have passed, and even today I still possess the zealous need to help people. In fact, one of my main goals is to open up free medical clinics around the world, staring with my hometown in America and then branching out to other countries. I want to spend summers in adverse countries and volunteer to help the patients. My experiences encourage me to excel in my schoolwork so that one day I can help people around the world. All the terrible things that I saw in India encourage me to persistent in all my endeavors. Even though many people possess the same desire as I do, I know that I will succeed in my endeavors because to me they are more than simple wishes aroused from pity, to me they are my goals in life, and I work very hard to reach my goals. What I would like to bring to UF would be my perseverance of working hard to reach my goals. I would also like to share my story of what I had seen and how everyone can make a difference.</p>