<p>Hey guys. I am applying to NCSSM (North Carolina School of Science and Mathematics).It's not a college. It is a high school for juniors and seniors, but I was hoping I could still post it in this forum. Also, there is a 1500 character limit, and I am around 150 above. What can I shorten?</p>
<p>"Please explain why you need to be part of the NCSSM Residential or Online academic program. Why can't your current school's resources and curriculum meet your needs?"</p>
<pre><code> NCSSM is a wonderful opportunity which I need in order to pursue my academics and extra-curricular activities. My home school, xxxxx High School, is unable to provide me with the opportunities that I need.
For example, I am currently taking AP Calculus AB/BC and AP Statistics. Next year, I will not have any math course to take at xxxxxxx. However, at NCSSM, I will be able to choose from a wide variety of advanced and quite interesting math courses such as Multi Variable Calculus and Combinatorics. This would be an amazing opportunity which I would never have at xxxxxxx. I will not only have access to more advanced math classes, but I will also have access to advanced physics courses such as Modern Physics. Also, we do not have AP Physics C which I would be able to take at NCSSM.
I am very interested in doing research in computer science and physics. However, my school does not offer any such class specified towards research. At NCSSM, I would be able to take classes and do research in computer science and physics. This would be an opportunity that I cannot miss.
My school, not only does not meet my academic needs, but it also does not offer the level of extra-curricular activities that I would like. Before I came to xxxxxxx, it did not have any math competition club. I formed a math competition club, but it did not gain a lot of support except for my friends who were also interested in a math competition club. Also, the school does not support our club enough. It would be great to be at a school such as NCSSM that actively supports math and science related extra-curricular activities.
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<p>It’s actually a pretty good essay. I would just edit it a bit to improve the clarity.</p>
<p>"I love the professors at my current institution and have made a great many friends here, yet in terms of academics I have hit a roadblock. </p>
<p>I am currently enrolled in the highest mathematics courses my school offers: AP Calculus AB/BC and AP Statistics. As a result next year I cannot enroll in further mathematics courses.</p>
<p>However, at NCSSM, I will be able to choose from a wide variety of advanced courses such as Multivariable Calculus and Combinatorics. Likewise I would be able to enroll in advanced physics and even computer science. </p>
<p>At the same time NCSSM offers a far greater amount of extracurricular activates that focus on math and science. Specifically… (needs new EC paragraph that focused on the clubs or competitions NCSSM is involved in. Also mention how much you want to work with other students)</p>
<p>(Optional is the research paragraph because it might be distracting listing three different points. Furthermore you would need to research what profs are doing and what and specify the type of research you are interested in) "</p>
<p>guidlines to follow:</p>
<p>While the prompt says " Why can’t your current school’s resources and curriculum meet your needs?" I would not advise directly addressing that point. The reason being is you don’t wanna come off as badmouthing your current school. Instead indirectly implying that you cannot get the education that you want at your current school is best. e.g. “As a result next year I cannot enroll in further mathematics courses.” </p>
<p>Instead focus more on what NCSSM can provide you. I think the 3rd paragraph does a great job of this. So just expand that same principle to the 4th and possibly 5th paragraph. </p>
<p>Lastly focus on BOLD and CLEAR writing. Sentences should be easy to read and be easy to skim. Make paragraphs small instead of dense. 1 sentence or 2 sentence paragraphs can work great with such a small word count. </p>
<p>Anyways I think you are off to a good start so just finish the 4th and 5th paragraph and I think your chances of admission will be high. </p>
<p>I think bomerr’s advice on how to polish it is good. I would add not to post essays publically, but to ask if you could private message them to people willing to read them- and you can do that with the revised version if you want it read. It protects you from any plagiarism concerns. </p>