Need help on college essay!!!

<p>The prompt is: Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story. </p>

<p>Can you help me edit it and include any comments or advice that you may have on my essay? Also, the limit is 650 words, but I have around 770. Thank you so much!!</p>

<p>Don’t worry about going over the limit. You can use the Additional Information box on the Common App writing section for that as long as you point out that you are continuing your essay onto it. PM me for your essay review</p>