<p>Been hitting road block after road block in this essay, all while battling writer's block! anyway would love some help :)</p>
<p>what’s your exact problem? do you have your topic(s) defined? if you have them all outlined, it should not be that difficult.</p>
<p>Yeah… what specifics do you need help with?</p>
<p>Anyways, my (current) advice is to just get it onto the page. Even if it’s terrible (as first drafts sometimes are), you can then start editing, changing things around, and at least making some sort of progress with it, you know? Maybe once you start, too, you’ll find that you like what you’re writing.</p>
<p>PROMPT #1: Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>
<p>My family and cultural background have profoundly shaped my dreams and aspirations. I come from a family which considers a good education lifes cornerstone. Both my maternal and paternal extended families have numerous academically accomplished intellectuals among them. Earning advanced degrees are a norm with no dearth of role-models to emulate. However, nobody embodies the value of an education more than my father who arrived as an adult immigrant with nothing on him except an engineering degree. His realization of the American dream was an outcome of return on his educational investment and of his desire to distinguish himself from the crowd. Therefore, an emphasis on education has been a major part of my growing up. I know the value of a good education and the opportunities it unlocks and it is for these reasons that my desire is to pursue a science and engineering degree which will challenge me while extending my capabilities and help me compete and succeed in life.<br>
Emphasis on academic success, at times, has been daunting. Growing up in a neighborhood where we were the only immigrant non-white family, I experienced conflict between my inherited and acquired culture which became more pronounced during my adolescent years. I was constantly juggling time between my academic and extra-curricular activities; whereas, many of my neighborhood friends appeared to have endless fun. The concept of a homework-free weekend did not exist in my home. Frequently leaving the street pick-up basketball game to go home to pick up the books did not always sit well with my friends which further strengthened the Indian immigrant stereotype in their minds. The culture conflict was real and the pressure to be like everybody else intense. During these days of conflict, the strength of my inherited culture appeared disappointingly weak and the weakness of my acquired culture appeared tantalizingly strong. My family was instrumental in helping me resolve this discord and as a result helped me emerge stronger. My inherited cultural ethos stresses investment in future over immediate gratification - a fact constantly reinforced by my fathers work ethic and his rise through corporate businesses. My acquired cultural traits emphasize big thinking and risk taking over predictable life turns. Through my father, I have been introduced to entrepreneurs with similar backgrounds to my families who have started their own businesses, some of which have grown into publicly traded companies. In a competitively professional and educational environment like this, I soon realized that my cultural values of my birth nation were not a liability but an asset.
I am proud of the decisions I have made and feel blessed in having a family that helps me look beyond teenage conflicts to reveal lifes true choices. My family helps me appreciate the value of making viable long-term decisions keeping my goals in full frontal view. The Indian-American background means more than a hyphenated census category to me. It embodies the best of both worlds and it provides me with cultural richness which I fully intend to build my life upon.</p>
<p>Don’t know why you’re trying to threadjack me ucbound12 but here’s my essay for Prompt #1</p>
<p>Describe the world you come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations </p>
<p>Eight months ago, I was granted the opportunity of joining Ciceros Pizza, not just as a busboy, but as a member of their family. At the outset, I could not have anticipated the impact this second family would have on me in the months to come, but now I can fully grasp the influence they have on me and my career goal to be a civil engineer.
I worked with a diverse and hardworking family, with each member contributing their best efforts to keep us going every night. Throughout my time at Ciceros, I learned about the different roads each person had taken before finding their niche in pizzeria, but considering all their differences, they still shared the same goal of providing the highest quality pizza to our continuously hungry customers. This family, dedicated to producing satisfied smiles from both loyal regulars and apprehensive new-comers alike, has influenced my desire to create those same smiles across the world, not through pizza, but through the creation of safe, long-lasting bridges, buildings, and roads I plan to be a part of as a civil engineer, knowing people are just as hungry for these things as they are for pizza. The pizzeria was a place that illustrated the wonders that can be done when a team wholeheartedly works towards a single goal, inspiring my dream to work with a group of dedicated minds, collaborating with them to connect the world together through civil engineering, creating happy faces along the way.
Even though my family members were able to work well together as a solid, efficient unit, they were not exempt from the competitiveness of the real world, teaching me the importance of striving to exceed your best work each time. I took their words of wisdom to heart and started competing with myself, knowing that there were several other applicants waiting to usurp my role, pressuring my own abilities to improve and impress more each shift. In less than three months, I moved up from busboy, to making salads, to decorating pizzas, taking on a bigger, more challenging part of the pizza-making process with each promotion. My familys competitive nature influenced where I picture myself in my future profession. Although I plan to strive for a dedicated team effort towards excellence, I will still remain competitive within the group, fighting for positions which contribute the most to reaching our goals. My co-workers instilled the competitive fire in me to want to play the biggest, most important role in the things I do, whether it is making pizza or civil engineering.
The family at Ciceros Pizza kindled my desire to be a part of a civil engineering team, geared towards producing smiles across the world through the creation of well-designed bridges, buildings, and roads. This experience of working with such an efficient group of people influenced me to believe that the best way to serve people, whether it is with pizza or through civil engineering, is by combining individual efforts into one team effort, each person harnessing the same goal of providing excellence to shape their work. My co-workers instilled in me the importance of competing within the group for the most important, involved roles. Without these people, I would never have fully discovered what I want to do with my future career choice, but since I have been a part of the Ciceros Pizza family, I see myself headed on a path towards the competitive field of civil engineering, ready to gain knowledge and prepare for a fulfilling, successful future.</p>
<p>bump!!</p>
<p>read please</p>
<p>Anybody willing to give feedback? Just want to know if the overall flow is good and if you can understand how the family I had there influenced my future goals.</p>
<p>It’s a little unclear to me whether this is really a family, in the sense of family owned business, or you are speaking metaphorically. I also wonder whether you should concentrate on either the teamworking theme or the competition theme. The two aren’t very well integrated. I see you want to get in the part about your fast promotions, but the impression it leaves on me is that it’s a pretty cut throat place to work, and all that stuff about collaboration is just there because it sounds nice.</p>
<p>The part about putting smiles on peoples faces by building roads and bridges seems a little forced. It certainly doesn’t need to be there twice.</p>
<p>Sorry for the threadjack mann but could u review my essay plzzz?</p>
<p>bump bump bumppp</p>