<p>Does this sound okay for a NHS essay?
It is an honor to be given the chance to be a part of the Maggie Gray Chapter of the National Honor Society at Grundy Center. Ever since I got into high school, I have wanted to be a part of NHS. I didn't really know much about NHS when I first got into high school, other than I wanted to be a part of it. After doing a little bit of research I learned more about what NHS really is. NHS focuses on the key components of academic excellence, scholarship, leadership, character, and service.<br>
I want to be in NHS because it is a great program that benefits the school and the community. I think that I would benefit a lot from this program. First off, I think it would help me to build up my leadership skills. There is public speaking involved with being in NHS, from what I've observed, and I think that would really help me as well. It would also be a great opportunity for me to give service to my community and my school, as I know that is a strong value in NHS. I believe that I deserve this honor and chance because I put a lot of effort into my academics and building up my skills and trying to become a better person. I think that this program would allow me to progress even further. As I said I have put a lot of effort into my academics and have a G.P.A. of 3.993 as of the end of first trimester this year. Since I am the class president, I have a big leadership role to fulfill and want to continue building up my leadership skills. I also like to think that sports have given me a lot of leadership qualities and have built up my leadership skills. I understand that service is another big part in NHS and I believe that I give service in the ways I can. I have volunteered my summer to help coach middle school softball, I help with FISH whenever there is an opportunity, and I also help out a lot with my church. Through NHS I believe that I could grow in my character, leadership, and help to give more service to my school and community.
I hope you consider me for the membership in the Maggie Gray Chapter of the National Honor Society. It would truly be an honor to be accepted into this program and I think I would benefit a lot through this experience. Thank you for this opportunity. </p>
<p>I think NHS essays are just a formality in most cases, but this essay is mostly filler and doesn’t really say anything. You should include more specific examples of how you show scholarship, leadership, service, and character in your life. </p>
<p>Yeah, you have to include stuff, not just say “I believe that I’m the best candidate”</p>
<p>Also, make sure you reread for warning signs.
For example, the first paragraph:
Ever since I got into high school, I have wanted to be a part of NHS. I didn’t really know much about NHS when I first got into high school, other than I wanted to be a part of it. </p>
<p>Do you think the admissions group wants to accept a candidate who says that they didn’t know anything about NHS except that they just wanted to be part of it? Take that part out or revise it so it doesn’t seem to give off a misinterpretation.</p>
<p>You’ll get into NHS, don’t worry… It’s not even that big of a deal.</p>