<p>So, I just finished a practice essay, and I'm a little bit worried. I don't think it was BAD, I'm just not sure that it was personal enough (I may have a slight problem being truly personal about anything). Also, the ending was a bit blegh. I'd really appreciate it if someone would read/critique it and let me know if I'm going in the right direction with this. Any and all advice is appreciated.</p>
<p>Please, though... Don't ask to read unless you've already graduated and are either in college or done with college.</p>
<p>Thanks in advance!</p>
<p>By the way, this essay was started as a for-fun essay, with no thought to college admissions. When I DID start thinking about college admissions, I rememberd this and figured I might as well finish it up as a potential Common App essay.</p>
<p>Yes. I write essays for fun.</p>
<p>Oh, forgot to mention: Don't read it if you're not gonna give me some sort of opinion! You'll just freak me out, and I'll assume you've stolen it and sold it to hundreds of other people all over the internet, after which I will proceed to curl up in a ball in the corner and have some sort of nervous breakdown.</p>
<p>I'd read it if you want. I don't know if I exactly fit your restrictions...I am going to be a freshman in the fall, definitely graduated from HS. I'll definitely give feedback.</p>
<p>writing essays for fun is cool!</p>
<p>Sure, but I will pound you if it's not good. Manure happens. Yes, my four years of studying Latin has paid off.</p>
<p>Class of '08. Feel free to PM it. =]</p>
<p>yes, i will read and give you feedback...:)
what college is this for?</p>
<p>coffeeicecream: I probably won't end up using this one, but theoretically it would be my Common App essay for a bunch of different places (Brown, Bard, Reed, Middlebury, Wesleyan, etc.). I would send it to you, but I'm really not sending any of my practice essays to people graduating in 09 or later. It's just a safety thing.</p>
<p>But I CAN tell you what it's about, in case your interested. Basically, it's the time I ripped my pants while saving a little girl's flip flop in the fun house at a Swedish amusement park, and afterwards transformed the INDECENCY into a sort of deconstructed chic look (heh... I can't believe I just used the phrase "deconstructed chic." Or the word "chic.") using a Swiss Army knife I semi-smuggled into the park. </p>
<p>I should have put a SPOILER ALERT in front of that before I said it. Meh.</p>