<p>hello so I've written my second uc essay about an experience that led me to acquire a personal quality, my particular experience being my depression. would anybody be willing to read it and give me some feedback on it?</p>
<p>here is the prompt just in case:
"Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?"</p>
<p>Is that the most important quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution, or experience that you have to talk about? I’m guessing no. I think this is a bad idea, personally, and would discourage my own kid from discussing a negative, even if you are better now. College apps are not the place to talk about the valleys in life, but instead, how one persevered to get to the mountain top. Talk instead about an accomplishment on contribution you made. </p>
<p>@TranquilMind I didn’t really want to talk about a contribution/talent/accomplishment because every time I tried it seemed too brag-y. And my essay is more based on my personal quality of courage rather than a sad story about my depression. I never even explicitly say I was depressed… it’s more about perseverance and how I acquired courage. Should I still completely scratch it?</p>
<p>I too discussed something about depression related to a family member’s death in my essay. I had several ppl read my essay, and most of peers they thought it was fine. However, my parents and their friends considered it negative and a bit dark</p>
<p>The point is not to talk about your “contribution/talent/accomplishment” per se, but to talk about what you learned, as a person, from doing them. That is a very different issue, and it is not bragging; it is insightful.</p>