Personal statement..hopefully i nailed it. Critique?

College Essays
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<p>This is a personal statement for Montclair University. My other essay seemed to formal, realized it didn't fit the part for this subject.
This one i believe shows off my personality more and gets the idea out.
Pm if you could read please!</p>

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<p>If you trust me (fellow 09er but not applying to Montclair) I'll read it.</p>

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<p>I'm applying Columbia ED, but sure if you trust me.</p>

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<p>That sounds more like an extra essay rather than a personal statement. I think that the PS is supposed to be used to explain why something happened. i.e. drop in grades because family member died. I could be wrong though...</p>

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<p>bump, anyone else?</p>

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<p>ile read it, just send it over</p>

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<p>email me: <a href="mailto:srrinath@gmail.com">srrinath@gmail.com</a></p>

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<p>I'll read that.
send it over !</p>

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<p>Sure, I'll be happy to evaluate it. Just give me a PM.</p>

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<p>ill read it email me @ <a href="mailto:unc0828@yahoo.com">unc0828@yahoo.com</a></p>

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<p>I can check it out</p>

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<p>I'll take a look.</p>

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<p>I'll gladly take a look.
Prepare for criticism.</p>

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<p>I'll take a look.</p>