Personal Statement??

College Essays
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<p>Is anyone willing to read the beginning of my Common App personal statement??</p>

<p>It obviously will need revision, but I just want to make sure that my train of thought is making sense... I really want people who don't know me to read it, so I don't want to ask my parents, friends, or teachers</p>

<p>Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!!
Thanks!</p>

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<p>PM it to me, if you want. I am a parent.</p>

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<p>I can take a gander at it.</p>