please critique my essay! :)

<p>I finished my essay for UCs (the first one).
One of my teachers said I just might qualify for the Regents' Scholarship so I'm assuming it must be somewhat good.</p>

<p>I would like your expert cal opinions!
Please post if I may PM it to you.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>pm me if u want</p>

<p>bump anyone?</p>