Please Critique my UC Personal Statement!

<p>Can someone be kind enough to provide critique/ provide feedback on my personal statement?</p>

<p>I can message anyone who's willing to help, thank you! ^_^</p>

<p>I would love to read it!</p>

<p>@SasukeCA‌
I’d be happy to read it for you. Message me it.</p>

<p>I can read it</p>

<p>@CHD2013‌ sent it to you! </p>

<p>@Smokedyou2‌ sure thing </p>

<p>@SasukeCA‌
Hey Sasuke Just in case you sent, I haven’t received anything. If you haven’t, then there’s nothing to worry about haha.</p>