<p>I took the November 2014 SAT and received a 10 on my essay. I would really appreciate some feedback and tips on how to improve the next time around. Thank you all in advance!</p>
<p>P.S I know my examples are not accurate at all, please just ignore that aspect unless you think it really impacted my score.</p>
<p>Prompt: Does working with others lead to better results than acting as an individual? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>Essay: Often times many people are accomplished as individuals, achieving notable success or are distinguished among their communities. Upon closer inspection, one realizes that the individual gains such results not from isolated preparations but from a cooperative group effort. Humans, as a whole, function as unique individuals cohesively living together in a communal setting. The sharing of ideas and working collaboratively produces results that reflect a union of a variety of thoughts, knowledge, and opinions. However, one must remain grounded in his own beliefs and resist complete adaptation of one's own thinking to mirror his ideas with others. A balance of individualistic creativity and group cooperation leads to a multi- faceted and well considered result that is many times better than an isolated one angled perspective.</p>
<p>Take the Seneca Falls Convention in the mid 1800s as an example. Outstanding individuals, Lucretia Mott, Susan B. Anthony, and Frederick Douglas were all attendees. Lucretia took a liberal standpoint, advocating for women's rights to be fulfilled in the immediate present; Susan B. Anthony grounded herself in a less aggressive standpoint by encouraging subtle changes in individual homes that would gradually culminate into a society where women could act with the independence and freedom they deserved. Frederick Douglas took yet another view that women's rights should be actuated along with the abolition movement for slavery to increase public awareness. The end result was a combined effort- aggressive literary promotion, small scale familial changes, and broad scope advocacy with the well- publicized abolition movement, that furthered the women's rights movement more than any previous efforts. It was this combined effort and individualistic stance that produced the most effective results, one that was as varied as the movement itself. </p>
<p>Yet another example presents itself in present day society- the work of renown TV show producer Shonda Rhimes. A principal producer for many shows such as Grey's Anatomy and Scandal, Shonda Rhimes develops her purpose and main theses for her shows and then expresses them to prospective directors, who through an integration of thoughts create a more diverse and complex meaning behind the shows. She meets with the actors and real life people the actors are portraying and after a big picture accumulation of all aspects of the show, she produces riveting, compelling, and relatable emotion- evoking shows that truly reflect the multi- perspective efforts of her work and the world portrayed through various points of view.</p>
<p>The community is simply a mixture of individuals and only when these individuals conjoin and actively share their beliefs and thoughts can a cohesive and well rounded community develop. Growth and maturity are defined by the ingrdients fo the people one meets, but the final product must be strained and refined to produce the best result. </p>