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Note: I followed the 10 days essay guide</p>
<p>No progress is possible without sacrifice</p>
<p>There can be no progress nor achievement without sacrifice, no matter how significant or trivial that sacrifice may be. Without sacrifices by our ancestors, we would not have been able to enter the golden era we are currently in. Several examples from history and literature clearly demonstrate that progress can only be achieved with sacrifice.</p>
<p>In the novel ‘Ender’s Game’ by Orson Scott Card, humanity faces an extraterrestrial threat in the form of alien creatures called ‘the Buggers’. These insect-like creatures threaten to decimate humanity as well as hinder its expansion into outer space. In order to defeat the Buggers, humanity sacrifices its children to be trained as soldiers and commanders in preparation for the war against the Buggers. An intrepid and momentous sacrifice, children, as young as six, are taken away from their parents for up to 10 years without ever returning. In the end, these children are the reason humanity wins the war, prevents its total destruction, and able to expand its territory. Therefore, the sacrifice of the children proves that before progress can take place, there has to be sacrifice.</p>
<p>The fact that sacrifice is crucial to progress is no clearer than that shown in history. During the Burmese-Siamese War in 1785, the people of Thalang (now Phuket Island) were left without a leader when the governor had died, all the while more than 3,000 Burmese soldiers were marching at their doorsteps. The wife of the governor, Khun Ying Chan and her sister, Khun Mook, were the only people left the citizen could depend upon. Instead of hiding behind thick walls, both women sacrificed their safety and luxury and rallied people from all over the island to fight. In addition, seeing as the Thalang army was heavily outgunned and outnumbered, ordinary women, too, sacrificed themselves, dressed up as men, and took on the fight along with the soldiers. Both sacrifices eventually led to their victory, and Khun Ying Chan and Mook were later bestowed the Thai honorific, Thao, to their names.</p>
<p>After a careful analysis of Ender’s Game and the Burmese-Siamese War, sacrifice is indeed imperative to progress. In both cases, without sacrifices, none of the progress that later took place would had come to be. Although sacrifices can be painful and difficult tasks, they are nevertheless crucial for progresses which may lead to the greatest change in a person and his or her community.</p>
<p>Do I need a third body paragraph to get at least a 10 here?
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