Please grade my essay! I'm really bad at essay. Somebody help me!

<p>This is my topic.</p>

<p>Change has a considerable psychological impact on the human mind. To the fearful it is threatening because it means that things may get worse. To the hopeful it is encouraging because things may get better. To the confident it is inspiring because the challenge exists to make things better.</p>

<p>Assignment: Do people fear change, or do they embrace it?</p>

<pre><code>Throughout the history of mankind, human beings have experienced numerous changes; some might be rather bigger than others while some are rather smaller so that people did not even realize the effects. Either in good or bad ways-or sometimes neither-, changes have affected humans. Humans can never guess whether changes would turn into friends or foes. They always fear the changes.

First, what changes bring is uncertain and unknown. If a person encounters a new and different surrounding, he/she would fear until he/she adjusts himself/herself to the new environment. In my case, I was an exchange student last year and I had to come to US by myself. I had have never been to US nor I had somebody who I know here. I had no clue what I would see or experience. Changes in my surrounding, including my family and friends, made me worry and fear about the future and what it holds.

Also, in humans’ history, people are always afraid of the usurpation of throne or change of power, especially change of their ruler. When a ruler has been changed-in most cases a more powerful person had got the power of a country-, the people are fearful due to the chances of societal upheaval. Changes can satisfy some people, but they can upset the others. When most people dislike the changes and their effects, those emotions lead to rebellion. This is also epitomized in French history-king Loius XIV and Marie Antoinette and French Revolution. When the king Louis XIV succeeded his grandfather and the royal court changed into an epitome of lavishness, French people fear the changes the new court brought. And they were right; the consequential shortage of food led them to rebel. The French Revolution does represent a reason for people to be afraid of changes.

Sometimes, changes benefit people after all. However, when people get to the point that they actually deal with a change, they fear because they are not sure about its effects; those can bring good effects like my case-I decided to go colleges in US even- or bad effects like French Revolution. Therefore, people could not help themselves but being afraid of the changes.
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<p>Thanks in advance! :D</p>

<p>this is no good at all- review basic writing skills</p>

<p>There are some critical problems in this essay:
This essay in general does not flow well, some of the word choices are inappropriate, one example is not well developed, the other one does not really answer the question, and the conclusion is too broad and weak.
There are also many minor problems:
Grammatical errors, poor example selection (usually personal examples are positively discouraged) and etc.
If available, try to get some tutoring. For most people, it helps them a lot.</p>

<p>I'm taking Oct. test(It is my first time taking SAT) and I will retake in Nov. Do you think I can improve a lot till November test?</p>

<p>Are you a Senior? If you are, obviously you don't have much time,
but I think you can improve a lot by November.
Still, it is very difficult for you to get 12 on November test,
but if you are brilliant and study hard, that's not impossible.
After all, writing a SAT essay is not as hard as it looks.
Just try to get a really good tutor.</p>

<p>Yes, I am a senior. It is really hard to get a tutor where I live. Do you think I can use some internet sites or so? I studied SAT really hard(and my score rose about 500 since January and I am still trying really hard). So I am really worried about essay because it WILL ruin my score. I'm so desperate right now. So depressed too!</p>

<p>I don't know anything about internet-based tutoring, so there's nothing I can tell you about it. Well, I guess it worths a shot.
You need to know how to write a stylish and organized essay. You can learn how to well organize your essay pretty easily, but acquiring a good style cannot be done instantly.
Since October test is your first one, consider it as if you were doing a practice test, and just have an idea of what real test feels like. And after that, just write essays consistently and get them graded. I'm pretty sure that your English teacher wouldn't mind looking over your essays.</p>

<p>Does writing essay everyday help you? But if I keep time, I would really not learn anything because I'm just concentrated on time limit. So maybe should I ignore the time limit for a while and then start to time it later?</p>

<p>This is precisely why you need a good tutor, because a tutor knows what kind of method works best for you. Since you can't get a tutor, I think it's a good idea to ignore time limit for a while, but try to spend as little time as possible.</p>