Please grade my essay ~Thanks~

<p>Please grade this essay and leave me some constructive critiques.Thank you in advance.</p>

<h2>I have posted two essays recently, and people says those essays have problems of lack of cause and effect or development of the examples, and trying to be smart and over sweet the essay.I think these comments accurately pointed out my problem. So while you are grading the essay, could you check for me about those two problems?</h2>

<p>Assignment: Are there benefits to be gained from avoiding the use of modern technology, even when using it would make life easier?</p>

<p>The intellectual history of human beings originates from a initial desire to live a easy life, and this desire has brought us to this highly-advanced 21st century where human race is finally liberated from tedious labor and is able to specialize in what they are best at----brainwork. Despite the obivious positive impact technology brings us, to abandon this newfound ease fosters beneficial changes, in terms of the way we treat resources and our own lives.</p>

<p>To restrict the use of modern convenience will significantly diminish our spendthrifty attitudes towards the earth’s riches. Modern technology fosters a wasterful pattern of consumption in our daily life. Back in the old days, paper are precious and are properly used. While the breakthroughs made in printing technology widely spread the innovative ideas and revolutionary thoughts, it made paper into something that can be mass produced, something that you can have a lot only paying a little money, something that has endless supply. Increasingly people are treating paper like air, soil and sunlight, ignoring the fact that more paper means more trees killed. Just take a look at SAT subject test. Every candidate, no matter how many subjects he or she really intends to take, will get a thick book of papers that contains al the subjects. Is it convenient? Of course it is. Candidates can change their subjects as late as the moment they receive the paper. Yet this extravagance is detrimental to the earth and our next generations. Would there be laws and regulations restricting the way papers can be used, candidates of SAT subject tests would have had to change their subjects a couple of weeks before the exam, and more trees would have survived.</p>

<p>Not only can limiting the use of technology better the earth, it can also better human beings by shaping a healthy and natural lifestyle. In Aristotle’s age, there was no electricity that enables people to brun the mid-night oil; there was no internet and television that distract people from what they intend to do; there was no cars that prevent people from walking with their own legs. There is no denying that electricity, internet and cars bring vast benefits and increased productivity; yet these high-tech products introduce a brand new life style that if brought to extreme will be imcompatible with to calls of our bodies. When our bodies require us to sleep, we suppress it by a cup of coffee and sit back in front of the computer screen to proceed with out work; when our bodies urge us to take a jog, we ignore it and take a taxi instead because it is more efficient. By delimiting the use of modern technology to a reasonable scope, we will retain a healthier lifestyle and a more productive approach to work.</p>

<p>Technology, like everything else, has two sides. For one, it increase productivity and reduce labor. For another, it deprive us of the virtue of thrifty and a healthy life. To avoid the use of technology will inevitably bring enormous improvement of human condition just like what the advent of technology once did.</p>

<p>9-10 possibly.I dont think it will be less than 9 more than 10</p>