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Assignment: Should leaders follow their own convictions or submit to public opinions？
Great individuals throughout history shape the world into what it is like today. Those people are notable leaders who devote themselves to the progress of society by following their own conviction. Leaders should follow their own convictions instead of public opinions, or their judgment and the destiny of society will go awry. This universal notion is exemplified through history.
The prime example is the everlasting president and the leader of the abolitionist movement of slavery. During his presidency, the racism problems erupted into the unbridled Civil War. At that time, most people were please to discover they can accomplish a great amount of work through a work force that not only require not compensation but also reproduce itself. Uncountable African American were beaten, separated from their families and forced to toil laboriously in field their entire life. However, Lincoln believed denying a person’s God’s given right based strictly on skin color would not make America a better democracy. Regardless of the public opinion, Lincoln held his own convictions and eventually issued Emancipation Proclamation. If Lincoln had submitted to the public opinion in a time when African American were segregated from mainstream society, America would have not been a democratic nation as it is today.
Another exemplary paradigm is the intrepid girl and the great leader—Malala Yousafzai, a seventeen-year-old Nobel Peace Prize winner who advocates for the right of Pakistani women and children. In Pakistan, the coercion, Taliban, forbids women to learn. Fearing the duress from the dictator, the public complies with the government’s edicts and do not want to fight back. However, Malala has an opposite belief. She believes her consanguinity deserves education right instead of succumbing to the coercion’s unequal laws. Following her own conviction, Malala opposes to Taliban and strives for the freedom and right of Pakistani, heedless of any unknown adversities or violent attacks. Because Malala clings to her own convictions rather than standing by and following the public, Pakistan has strived forward to be a more advanced and democratic nation.
From the quintessential epitomes above we can comprehend that great leaders follow their own conviction instead of public opinion. Leaders are the one who judge the whole course of the society, were these leaders led astray by the public opinion, the society would go awry. Was it not John Kennedy who stated:” The world is leaders’ to shape, all we have to do is to believe in ourselves.”
Typing mistake. I wrote “The prime example is the everlasting president and the leader of the abolitionist movement of slavery—Abraham Lincoln” in my essay paper