Please grade my essay

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<p>Topic: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>

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<p>Could someone please grade and comment on my essay? Thanks in advance!</p>

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<p>the prompt is something along the lines “Is technology bettering/harming our lives?” yeah?</p>

<p>if so you answered it pretty well; flow’s pretty good, good transitions, but the essay is not sprinkled w/ some SAT words, also has slight grammatical mistakes.</p>

<p>this is probably a 10/12 essay</p>

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<p>Well, I will say my opinion:
Essay: 10/12

  1. I don’t see any connection btw “technology” and “drugs”- first example wasn’t impressive and good.
  2. Other examples are great.
  3. Language is “easy reading”, I liked that, but notice that people in CollegeBoard who are scoring essay wouldn’t like that.
  4. Introduction isn’t perfect. Althrough it is good, but not perfect. In my view, it’s better to begin as “AcademicHacker” says. (…Several examples from literature/current events/etc proffs that…) or (…evidence to my opinion is…)</p>

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<p>Anyway, Good Luck!</p>

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<p>The OP clearly states that the prompt is as follows:</p>

<p>Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>

<p>So, modern drugs (and their negative effects) are definitely relevant to the prompt.</p>

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<p>Apparently, Suleyman knows every single essay grader and their personal preferences about style. Simply put, Suleyman is wrong. There is nothing with simple language, though adding a few “SAT words” here and there wouldn’t hurt.</p>