Please, grade my first essay ever

<p>Hi. I am an international student, so I cannot get help from home. Please, tell me if I am on the right track.</p>

<p>Statement:</p>

<p>Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.</p>

<p>Some people believer that there is only one foolproof plan, perfect solution, or correct interpretation. But nothing is ever that simple. For better or worse, for every so-called final answer there is another way of seeing things. There is always a 'however'.</p>

<p>Assignment: Is there always another explanation or another point of view? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>Here it comes:</p>

<p>No issue has a standard explanation. Though people usually are acquainted with a single solution to a problem, that does not mean there are no other points of view. Seeking for the secrets behind natural phenomena, scientists throughout history have come up with more than one theory to explain certain issues.</p>

<p>Sometimes, an explanation appeals so much to the public, that any attempt from a different angle is dismissed. Regarding the apparition of man on Earth, the ancient world had no doubt that the Creationism theory was true. This is why, when Charles Darwin first presented the Evolutionism theory, nobody believed him. Today, while this theory is hunanimously accepted, archeological discoveries have revealed several man-made objects dated from the dinosaur era, which contradicts it. Probably a new theory is being developed. So we cannot say there is a perfect theory.</p>

<p>In other cases, a theory encounters practical aspects it cannot explain. When it happens, a new theory has to be developed. This is why the succession of atomic models has appeared. As soon as the Rutherford model could not explain the nucleus stability, Bohr developed a new one. However, because it only explained the behavior of nuclei with a single electron, it was soon replaced with the quantum model. We are unable to view the atom structure, so these models are never to be completely confirmed.</p>

<p>There are also situations when several theories reach the same conclusion. Both the Molecular Orbital Theory and the Bond Valence Theory correctly explain the geometry of molecules. While the former assumes that atomic orbitals form a single group of molecular orbitals with different energies, the latter states that each atom changes its orbital energy to overlap with other orbitals. Although their approach is different, the result is always the same geometry.</p>

<p>As science reveals, an issue can be attached from different points of view. Whether a second method is completely inovative, covers certain imprecisions or simply functions as well as the first, it will always show up. We can never reach unanimity.</p>

<p>I have 5 comments.</p>

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<li><p>I think you meant to use the word "appearance" instead of "apparition"</p></li>
<li><p>I think you meant to use the word "unanimously" instead of "humanimously"</p></li>
<li><p>I wouldn't compare society after "Origin" was published to "the ancient world" but rather to Europe in 1858. Of course, you can't dismiss that world as having a unanimous belief in the creation by God as easily as you can the world before anyone had created systems of writing.</p></li>
<li><p>You appear to be saying that in ancient times there was unanimity regarding creationism, but in your conclusion, you say that we can never reach unanimity.</p></li>
<li><p>You seem to be depending an awful lot on the work of Thomas Kuhn, but you don't mention him by name. If these are ideas you have heard but you aren't familiar with Kuhn (I know I've certainly heard certain of Kuhn's insights being referred to as "obvious" these days), I would suggest you go read the article "Thomas Kuhn" in The Stanford Encyclopedia of Philosophy, which is a free online resource.</p></li>
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<p>I have never heard of Thomas Kuhn, nor have I 'heard' of these ideas. I am a science person and I studied those concepts, and I came up with those ideas only for this essay.</p>

<p>Anyway, I read that proofreaders don't care too much whether the arguments are true or not, but whether you do a clear reasoning. Thanks for your comments, but just a grade for this essay would have been much helpful.</p>

<p>Anyone, please?</p>

<p>alright. it's not bad, i'd give it an 8-9. i think the grammar could use some work, some sentences are a bit wordy and others lack flow. vary up sentence structure, as this will make your writing seem a bit more interesting. </p>

<p>now, here's something i'm noticing, although i can't say if its good or bad. the examples you use are all from science. personally, i think that by adding a personal experience you could lighten up the mood a bit, but idk. that's just my opinion.</p>