<p>This is my first essay that I've written. Could you grade it for me please and also give me some pointers and tips on how to improve it. It would be very helpful.</p>
<p>PROMPT: Can knowledge be a burden rather than a benefit? </p>
<p>"Humans are the most intellectual and imaginative creatures to set foot on this earth. Since our existence we have discovered methods for the creation of fire, artificial light, television, and medicine. We have solved so many of our world's mysteries and secrets. But, has our knowledge taken us too far? Have we stepped into an age in which our advances and knowledge become burdensome? From global warming to robotic policies to our inflated ego to 'super bugs', human knowledge may be on the verge of becoming a burden.</p>
<p>Global warming is a daily reminder of the consequences of our technologies, which are a direct product of our vast knowledge as a species. Greenhouse gas levels are increasing exponentially in our atmosphere resulting in the demise of species, destruction of ecosystems, loss of biodiversty, and even an increase in extreme weather. There is a definite correlation between increasing temperatures and extreme weather which is resulting in unbelievable destruction such as the destruction during Hurricane Katrina. A direct result of the internal combustion engine and the aggregation of greenhouse gas emitting energy sources, global warming is a burden due to our human knowledge and our advances in technology.</p>
<p>In 2005, the Korean government was faced with an interesting, yet disturbing dilemma. The advances in robotic technology in the extremely modern society called for "Robot Policies" to be drawn up to prevent future robots from being abused by their owners and vice versa. An estimate for their government suggests that robots may carry out surgery by the year 2035. These advancements, a amazing as they seem, are turning burdensome. Many policies, rules, and regulations are being formulated to keep everyone's rights in place. Who would've thought the day would come when robots would need their own 'voices' to be heard! Studies say that robots may even become children's best friends after the mass production of domestic robots beings in the future. This poses variegated ethical issues and poses to be a major issue in the future. Our human knowledge and mind has led to such a situation.</p>
<p>The human mind and knowledge results in our arrogance and callous attitude. We, as a whole, think that we are head and shoulders above anything to ever set foot on our planet. This leads to less consideration to the devastation that we are causing across our planet. We feel that if it isn't related to us, then it doesn't matter. This should not be the case. Our human knowledge has isolated us from the rest of the planet and has left a gaping hole in our place in the planet's natural system. Our knowledge of medicine and antibiotics has resulted in resistance bacteria known as super bugs. MRSA, along with other bugs are spreading throughout the globe posing a looming future threat.</p>
<p>Therefore, human knowledge has now become burdensome. it has created global, ethical, moral, and many other issues. We have been given a gift. A gift that allows us to think about the future and find solutions to problems, but now it seems like we are doing much of the opposite. Our knowledge should be treated carefully. However, in the end, humans have always developed solutions to problems. So, let's hope that we can rid of these burdens by using our immense knowledge."</p>
<p>So, what do you think. Could you give me a score on the 1/12 scale? I am trying to figure out my score for my practice test. Any tips, advice or anything would be awesome! Thanks....oh and the part about the robot policies is true, I read about it in business class, but it was vague in my memory, so it kind of sounds unprofessional when I don't list the actual sources for the study and such. I just don't remember.</p>