<p>Please score my 4th SAT essay. Any help or feedback at all, will be very much appreciated. :)</p>
<p>I also have a question: how much of the prompt are you allowed to recycle in your essay? In this essay, I borrowed a lot of the wording that was in the prompt. Is this inadvisable?</p>
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<p>Prompt: A mistakenly cynical view of human behavior holds that people are primarily driven by selfish motives: the desire for wealth, for power, or for fame. Yet history gives us many examples of individuals who have sacrificed their own welfare for a cause or principle that they regarded as more important than their own lives. Consciencethat powerful inner voice that tells us what is right and what is wrongcan be a more compelling force than money, power, or fame.</p>
<p>Assignment: Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?</p>
<p>It is impossible to deny that selfish desires, such as money, fame, or power, may be alluring for some. However, the cynical view of human behavior, which holds that society is primarily driven by these selfish motives, is indeed fallacious. History itself provides us with many examples of individuals, such as Nelson Mandela and Mother Theresa, who have sacrificed their own welfare for a cause or principle that they regarded as more important than their own lives. These examples prove to us that conscience is truly a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power.</p>
<p>The life of Nelson Mandela epitomizes the role of conscience as a compelling force in human history. A dominant force in ending South Africas racial policy of apartheid, Mandela served over twenty seven years in prison for leading resistance against the unjust apartheid regime. He believed in a cause that was more important than his own life, and therefore sacrificed his freedom for its advancement. This was a man motivated not by selfish desires, but by something greater and much more powerful his conscience. His actions have changed the world, leaving a legacy that will live on for posterity. Mandela demonstrated that actions motivated by the conscience can achieve much more than anything motivated by selfish desires. </p>
<p>Mother Theresa, like Nelson Mandela, is another individual whose actions have proved to us the power of the human conscience. Whereas Nelson Mandela gave up his freedom for apartheid, Mother Theresa sacrificed her personal comfort and welfare for a cause which she also believed to be more important than her own life. Throughout her entire life she worked tirelessly to better the lives of the poor, giving up all worldly comforts in pursuit of the greater good of humanity. After receiving the Nobel Peace Prize in 1979 for her contributions in overcoming world poverty, she asked that the $192,000 prize be donated to the poor in India, and continued to live an austere existence. Personally, I believe that this particular act of charity inexorably demonstrates conscience as a more powerful motivator than any worldly desire such as money, fame or power.</p>
<h2>Having considered these examples, it can be seen that conscience that powerful inner voice that tells us what is right and what is wrong is indeed a more compelling force than selfish motives. Nelson Mandela and Mother Teresa are not mere exceptions to the rule, for history provides us with many more examples of individuals, such as Aung San Suu Kyi, Oskar Schindler, and Martin Luther King, who have all sacrificed their own welfare for a greater cause.</h2>
<p>Thanks for reading. :)</p>
good luck for the January test! if you write one more body paragraph, it would defo be 10+/12</p>