Please Grade my SAT essay out of 12?????

<p>Is it better for people to learn from others than to learn on their own?</p>

<p>Learning from others is more useful than learning on our own; we evaluate ourselves more accurately when consider other opinions and listen to their experiences and learn from them.While some people completely deny the existence of others since they think that individuality is more important than relying on others, however they won't evaluate themselves and they will never realize their mistakes. While, Being gregarious and learning from others, make us see our flaws we have been making for several years; literature and world history demonstrates my perception.</p>

<p>In the novel "Brave new world",The protagonist, John the savage, grows up in a traditional native american community. While the rest of the world is ruled by a dictator, who forces everyone to behave according to a certain ideology called "Ford ship" which completely denies the existence of family, religion, philosophy and etc... John visits the society, and he becomes appalled of how technologically and inhumanely the society is.He spends his whole life telling people that only family and religion can bring a truly happy life. The people learned from him and they evaluated themselves because of him. </p>

<p>In ancient Greece, 200 B.C, modern logical thinking began to see it birth. Socrates the modern Einstein in his age, innovating in science, math and reasoning, always taught his students to ask the question why. No matter what an authority said ,he always told them to ask the reasoning behind it. The leaders of classical Greece feared the power that had enthralled in the educated mass so they charged Socrates for corrupting the youth. Even though he was charged, his concepts of questioning any authority lived on his disciples. Without learning from that man, the democratic government of Greece wouldn't have been an archetype of a successful government. So learning from others can make us see many valuable axioms and aphorisms that stop us from doing anything abruptly without thinking. </p>

<p>Martin Luther King, a soft spoken Christian minister, decided to fight for black equality.Although He faced many perils and castigations, he stood up and fought for what he believed; in events like March on Washington, he peacefully yet boldly stated the flaws he saw in America. Without him, America wouldn't have learned from its mistakes and it wouldn't have encompassed so much equality as it is now. </p>

<p>People who are like John the savage, Socrates and Martin Luther king, teach us many important lessons in our lives and make us see our shortcomings and from that point we get to develop our selves for the better and for the best.</p>

<p>Doing better! But you still have many incomplete sentences. Remember that when you use clauses (which often begin with words like while and when), you still need a main subject and verb.</p>

<p>Thanx Jazz park, I tried my best to keep away from my frequent mistakes. What grade will you give me :)??? hehe</p>

<p>I don’t want to discourage you, but your essay needs many, many revisions. For both content and mechanics, it is below high school standards.</p>

<p>Your 3 references to the argument are fine, but the explanations tying them to your argument need to be much clearer.</p>

<p>I think that you need to tie in the examples to the prompt a little better. And there are a few grammar problems that need fixing. Other than that, it looks pretty good!</p>

<p>Yeah I should have tied them more accurately, maybe I didn’t find other words :3</p>

<p>Cromba, is English your native language? It sounds like it isn’t. You should be aware of TOEFL, which is the Test of English as a Foreign Language. If you look on the web, there are lots of practice tests, which should help you improve a lot.</p>

<p>Yes, English isn’t my native language.
I searched the website found lots of interesting sample essays. thanx for the advice</p>