Please grade this essay!

<p>The toplc of this essay and the essay is below. Please grade it. I took it under timed condition.</p>

<p>Prompt: Is it better for people to learn from others or their own?</p>

<p>Essay
To learn on one's own is to learn in deed! Contrary to what the school system has made us to believe, that we learn from our professors, we truly learn on our own. Or better still, we learn better by ourselves than from others. A few examples illustrate how much this holds true.</p>

<p>A couple of years ago, i decided to attend summer school by going two classes ahead of myself. I had never done this before and did'nt realize how difficult it was going to be for me. During the course of this foray, i found that i hardly ever followed in class and would score zero in tests that every other student seemed to easily glide through. As such, i began to study my elder brother's notes that constituted the two classes that i skipped. Within two weeks, i became the best chemistry student in summer school. Alll that wouldn't have been possible had i simply gone through the usual student-teacher learning technique. I had achieved a daunting feat by learning by myself.</p>

<p>Statistics have it that kids with genius IQ's invariably learn things on their own. To say the very least, school slows down the learning process and grossly minimizes what one can learrn per time. Most geniuses are able to master advanced calculus at very young ages ''on their own.'' It also turns out that they wind up being better at it than students who learned by the conventional way of the teacher-student model. This, i believe, is a major factor that separates learning by oneself from learning from others.</p>

<p>Children are another great exemplification of how much people learn on their own. This may sound cliche but you don't teach a child to stay away from hot objects. As a matter of fact, telling a child to abstain from something makes him/her want to do that thing. Contrarily speaking, if the child learns on his/her own that such a thing is bad, he/she seems to become a better individual. He/she abstains from that act based on personal experience, which they say is the best teacher.</p>

<p>Having said all, it is unequivocally true that too learn by oneself, by all standards, beats learning from others.</p>

<p>probably an 8 or 9</p>

<p>Thought it’d be like 10. Is it because there are no examples from history and literature? I believe personal xamples work as much. In the bb a 12 essay had only personal examples</p>

<p>It may get a 10 with some nice graders, it’s not a bad essay by any means. You have a good format down, you just need to work on writing at a more advanced level to get a 10+. Your writing level is perhaps above-average, but if you look at most 12s, they read like sophisticated journal articles… With more advanced vocab, more complex sentence structure, and a longer and more complete conclusion, I say it’s a 10+.</p>

<p>I guess i agree with u on that one. I rili need to work on dat. Thanks though for being candid</p>

<p>More on the 8. Keep in mind that u need TRANSITIONS SENTENCES at the begining of every paragraph linking back to the topic.</p>