Please grade my SAT essay

<p>TOPIC-Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today?</p>

<p>ESSAY:
Humans have ostensibly unorthodox capabilities. One of these outstanding capabilities is creativity. However, this world with its myriad and notable creative inventions does indeed need more inventions and creativity than ever before. It is true that this world of ours has reached the sky but still it hasn't reached its limits. </p>

<p>We need creativity in inventions that won't just make our life easier but also better. Global warning crisis's warnings and exhortations conventionality are very commonplace now-a-days. True, one can find these admonishments anywhere, but, unfortunately, the attention that they receive is as insignificant as as the attention an annoying bug receives; they are always there in the forms of banners in the streets or orthodox ads in the television and other media or also exhorting lectures in textbooks. Though they are very blatant and their well-being exhortations are very foreshadowing, people always tend to ignore them. The reason isn't in their lack of eclectic and magisterial information; it is just they lack the creativity needed to grab people's attention. If they are watered with creativity, they are certainly going to thrive in their quest. Organizations should seek what grabs people's awareness and use it. Moreover, these exhortations shouldn't be in the forms of T.V. ads that will be skipped while watching a favorite show, they should be outstandingly creative in a way that people would skip a favorite show to engage spiritually and intellectually with them. </p>

<p>Similarly, communication technology has reached outstandingly out-of-the-box breakthroughs. From the wide range of mobile phones, portable computers to all-the-time available access to the internet, this world has brightened with every breakthrough. However, there is still a commonplace incompetence with cell phone towers' job. Truly, many fear traveling out of the country without company for fearing that crises may occur without the availability of network signal in phones to call for help. For, example a man would be driving on an-out-of-the-country highway and would encounter a flat tire or, even worse, a medical crisis; as it is easy to call help, mobile phones may encounter many no-signal cases which is as bad as being stuck in the desert alone. Communication organizers and inventors should create a way that can impede this befallen situation. Indeed, inventors could create a portable telecom mast that won't face the case of unavailability and won't put lives in risk, as telecom masts have always been warned to have notable medicals risks. And so, creativity is needed to improve an invention that can make life worry-free.</p>

<p>The world might not be in black-and-white as it was before, but its colors aren't as bright as they should be.</p>

<p>I would give it a 3 out of 6. Intro should more explicitly state the thesis. The entire essay seems more of an exercise to use big words than to state and support a position. I recommend starting over with a clear thesis and the focusing on how you can support that thesis as simply as possible. The conclusion should summarize the support and restate the thesis.</p>

<p>The entire essay seems more of an exercise to use big words than to state and support a position.</p>

<p>This was my initial thought, too. What does “Humans have ostensibly unorthodox capabilities” mean?</p>

<p>Thank you @CHD2013 and @Middkid86 for your kind comments; I would make sure to work with the introduction and the conclusion. However, are the examples satisfying?</p>