Please help me grade this English Lang essay.

<p>I am an ESL learner so I am not sure whether I am suitable for this exam. The essay topic is the 2008 Question #2, the essay about analyzing the rhetoric strategies of the author's writing about scientific research. Thanks in advance. </p>

<p>John M. Barry characterizes scientific research as the exploration of the uncertainty which needs courage, ambition, and the ability to choose decisively. However, describing this process itself is abstract and hard to understand so Barry employs many rhetoric devices such as compare and contrast, analogy and giving example to illustrate his points clearly.
To introduce uncertainty, a main topic in the essay, Barry compare and contrast it with certainty, which “creates strength”. By asserting that uncertainty is the very thing most people want to avoid in lives, Barry emphasizes the challenge to be a scientist. Because all of scientific researches are tested in unknown areas, scientists must learn to accept sudden breakdown.
Then the author relates science to its very nature, the adventure on the frontier. So every scientist, as analogous to an explorer, no matter how ambitious, is determined to find something brand new and expects that his or her discoveries can revolutionize people’s thoughts. However, as dangerous as a hiker on a mountain, a scientist risks getting nothing at all simply because “a single step can take one off a cliff” of science.
In the fifth paragraph, Barry uses an extended analogy to illustrate the difficulty of scientists in deciding the method to study. In a completely dark space, anything is not available so the scientist must from the very beginning invent everything he needs. In making the process accessible, Barry uses the example of studying sand and rock. Every tool, shovel, pick, or dynamite, has its own strengths and weaknesses, especially for the dynamite, which essentially leaves nothing after being used. Indeed, a scientist is just like a child. Can we, after all, expect a child to manipulate the shovel, the pick or even the dynamite adroitly?
If the scientist succeeds, by trial and error and some luck, what will happen next? Barry believes that a road will soon be constructed so that everyone, if willing, can freely enter the area and make use of the convenience developed by the pioneer painstakingly for several months. Finally, the new frontier of science will be fully developed by subsequent researchers.
In the ending paragraph, Barry reiterates the importance to “embrace uncertainty”. Only those who can be comfortable with uncertainty, accept unexpected results of experiments, and modify experiments to yield the desirable answer can finally succeed in science.</p>

<p>There are grammatical errors in your essay, but your vocabulary is pretty good. I could correct your grammatical mistakes, but I’m afraid I might add more intead since I’m an ESL student myself.
You’re definitely suitable for this exam. Get one of those grammar and composition books and MEMORIZE those rules; write them on your brain, metaphorically speaking, of course. Learn the difference between an adverb and an adjective, conjugation of the verb “to be”, (yes, we all think we know it until it comes to writing an essay) and review the subject-verb agreement; you seem to be struggling with these the most.</p>

<p>Thank you for your reply, goldfish2.</p>

<p>You’re welcome. I hope it was helpful! :)</p>

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