PLEASE, PLEASE grade my SAT essay! I'll grade your's :)

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<p>Please grade my SAT essay and please also explain them. Your honest input will be highly appreciated. I will make sure to return the favor. I have written the essay in 25 minutes and then typed it up. Please be brutally honest!!</p>

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**Essay Prompt:</p>

<p>Carefully consider the following quotations:</p>

<p>“Never discourage anyone...who continually makes progress, no matter how slow.” Plato (427 BC - 347 BC)</p>

<p>“Always bear in mind that your own resolution to succeed is more important than any one thing.”
Abraham Lincoln, 16th president of US (1809 - 1865)</p>

<p>Assignment:
Is one formula for evaluating all students/schools a sound practice? Are test scores the best indicator of achievement and/or potential?</p>

<p>Plan and write an essay expressing your opinion on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations. **

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<p>Here is my essay :</p>

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I contend with the notion that test scores are the singular means of judging the potential of a student. Even though numbers do give a good assessment of a student's academic ability from testing, there are other means of determining potential in the form of talent and extracurricular activities. Episodes of literary and historical evidence will exemplify this assertion.</p>

<p>The character Snowball from "Animal Farm" by George Orwell exemplifies the very notion that a student's potential cannot be asessed unilaterally. He was a brilliant leader and organizer who brough prosperity to Animal farm after expelling the farmer through mutiny. Despite his talent, he was a very poor as a student as seen through his defiance to his mentor,Old Major. The case for Snowball elicits that sheer talent and creative thinking can bring about more success than academic credentials.</p>

<p>Another literary figure who defies the notion that a student's potential can be determined through one formula is Achilles from Homer's "Illiad." Homer's account tells us that Achilles was such a terrible student academically that he had to drop out. However, Achilles comes to become the greatest generals in the Trojan war, as depicted in "Illiad." Indeed, numbers alone could never have dictated such a succuess in Achilles's life. Hence, a student is not hopeless if he fails in terms of numbers. There are other factors, such as leadership and non-academic brilliance that are equally quintessential.</p>

<p>Albert Einstein, who is renowned for his brilliance in the field of physics, was a failure at school. It is indeed ironic that he failed mathematics and science courses since he is famous in these field. He had talent and had a passion for experimenting. He has revolutionized the study of physics through his theory of relativity. Again, we see that talent and passion is triumphant over test scores and academic ability. Abert Einstein exemplifies a success story where academic numbers are insignificant.</p>

<p>Therefore, a student cannot be assessed through a single formula. There are other variables such as leadership, talent, passion and so on. As Mahatma Gandhi once said, "the greatest teacher for a student is himself."

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<p>Please grade on a scale of 0-6, 6 being best. This is the first time I've written a SAT essay.</p>

<p>Thanks!! :) :) :)</p>

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<p>Please help :)</p>

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<p>if you can't grade your own essay, how do you expect to grade others?</p>

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if you can't grade your own essay, how do you expect to grade others?

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<p>I know how to grade essays. I don't think I should grade them to eliminate chances of bias.</p>

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<p>Come on, any insight will be highly appreciated :)</p>

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<p>I would give it a high 5-low 6 (fourth paragraph "abert einstein" but that's only minor) just a knee-jerk grade I have no basis in how I scored. Just my personal opinion, it's pretty amazing that you could actually write that in 25mins and that it would fit on two pages handwritten. My only real problem with the essay is that you didn't include any personal experiences.</p>

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<p>4... maybe 5.</p>

<p>I felt like some examples weren't explained thoroughly.</p>

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<p>ok, but.... ehh.
it isnt extraordinary, and you should work on your synonyms. (i hate it when the same words are used twice, one sentence after another- exemplify).</p>

<p>really, it is an ok, good essay. i like your examples, and i felt you fully explained them. but a more personal point of view in this particular essay might have been better.</p>

<p>bottom line- 4.5, maybe a 5 (maybe)</p>

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<p>5 on a 6 scale,
11 on a 12 scale</p>

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<p>I'd give it a nine.</p>

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<p>this deserves
11</p>

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<p>refer to:</p>

<p>College Discussion > College Admissions and Search > SAT and ACT Tests & Test Preparation > SAT Preparation > SAT essays<br>
which can be found at
<a href="http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?p=2904922#post2904922%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/showthread.php?p=2904922#post2904922&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

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<p>lol^</p>

<p>i don't know why, but after going to that link..i couldn't stop laughing.</p>

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<p>i give it a 11... only because i sense it is missing a touch.. though it's just feeling...</p>

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<p>wow, this is strange</p>

<p>MOST OF THE PEOPLE on this thread seem to be nice, and this will prolly make me sound like a jerk, but...
I'll be honest</p>

<p>I think its about a 3.
Maybe 4, but not likely.</p>

<p>Your score on this would be 7-8
I've written far longer, more quality (not to brag) essays, and they were only given 9's so...yeah.</p>

<p>Sorry to be a bummer, but I think I'm correct in my analysis</p>

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<p>i would give this essay a 8
grade mine :D</p>

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<p>hi am from Egypt i will have the sat test just in six days i hope you help me grade my essay it is my first time to write here please grade my essay and tell me about your oppinion in my way of writting how to improve it and so :D</p>

<p>here it is the essay assingment</p>

<p>do society’s rules limit our decisions such that our choices are not freely made?</p>

<p>my essay</p>

<p>many people think that they are free to do whatever they want and nothing can effect their decisions but ,ironically, our decisions are effected by many things. first of all the situations we face in our daily life effects us , our society’s costumes and traditions effects our decision, and finally the country we live and the nature of people ruling like the that of ‘‘Hosny Mubark’’ before the Egyptian revolution effects our decisions
the situation we face in our daily life are the best example to effect our decisions. imagine a family decided to spend the summer in France ,and they have prepared the needed money to travel, but a sudden situation had happened like they are robbed and their money was gone ,so they decided to spend the summer in their country with their relatives. weather they spend the summer with their relatives or in France their situation effects their decision and make them fluctuate it
moreover, the costumes and the traditions of the country we have brought up in also effects our decisions in life. like in my country,Egypt,girls are not allowed to wear short clothes ,like short skirts , or have a boyfriends because of the costumes of the egyptian people an the religious traditions in Egypt which prevent them from doing that ; however, having a boy friend and freely wear what you want is accepted in society in other countries like Europian countries and american countries and is not forbidden. so the costumes of the country we live in and its religion may effect our decisions
Also, the rulers of the country and their policies may effect the peoples’ opinions like what people coexisted before the egyptain revolution. Before the egyptain revolution people used to be tortured . they used to have their essential rights stolen in their country like expressing their opinions , having the freedom to write whatever they want in journals. they were always prevented to understand anything, and if anyone do express his opinion he/or she will be jailed or sentenced and accused of treason ; consequently, people used to express in their journals what they have to say according to them no what in their mind because they are afraid of their torture
ultimately it is how we perceive matters that actually counts. the situations we face , the traditions of a country , the nature of our ruling people may effect our decisions and make us change it like take the ones that not in our intentions . their is no pure decision, always must be effected .</p>

<p>please grade it</p>