Please predict my essay score!!!!!

can someone predict my essy score…it was bad…

i wrote two pages but ugh

the prompt was how much importance should be placed on others advice when making good descisions

i said yes, the essay went something ike this

As the saying goes, “two minds are better than one.” we like to thik that we have all the answers, but our flaws prevent us from making all important decisions correctly. Fortunately, this is where people come in. WHen we place importance on others advice, we combine multiple perspectives…(i dont really remember this part) that provide a well rounded perspective that enable us to make good decisions correctly.

The austin think tank is a model of how well this works…(something like that). They have innovated many useful inventions that contribute to society. The reason this happens is because we combine all of our perspectives. when human minds work together, we choose the parts of other peoples ideas that are good and then consolidate the results. Each perspective checks the others, so then we are presented with a perspective that is the key to making a good decision.

Proof of this is also shown in a more personal light. My friend, Emily, was stuck in a quagmire. She had recently completed the sat, but she “knew” she failed and pondered whther to cancel her scores or not. Fortunetly, herf friends, including me, hurriedly told her not to cancel and told her why. After placing much importance on our advice, Emily decided not to cancel. As a result, she woke up the day the scores came out and delightedly recieved a 2300. This success shows us that when placing importance on others advice, we learn to look at things from a different perspective and thus are more likely to make good desicions.

All in all, the Austin think tank and Emily show us how beneficial it is to place importance on others advice. (i forgot what i wrote her but its something like: by combining our minds and others, we are presented with a wiser, smarter perspective that is more likely to make important desicions correctly.)

OK i know it was bad…idk what happened to me. Please give me an honest score so that i can expect the worst. it was redundant, i know, not insightful…omg i want to go back in time and fix it

but anyways, ignore the grammar error bc ther arent on the actual thing. sorry for the typos im rushed bc i gtg somewhere. Im expecting a 5, 6. If you do answer, please justify it. Thanks guys!

I feel like this would get an 8, I understand your thesis but it’s not very strong to me and the essay does feel choppy in some areas. Transition words would have helped to direct your examples more clearly. Just my viewpoint though (I’m pretty sure my essay I wrote wasn’t that good either so I’m in the same boat as you as for worrying about my essay score).