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College Essays
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<p>Hey,</p>

<p>After getting some acceptances and rejections at some schools, I have been wondering how I can improve my essays for my transfer applications. </p>

<p>I had a family friend who teaches English look over my Common App essay and personal statement and she changed a lot of it and I didn't realize that this might actually be a bad thing. So I was wondering which essay was better, my version or the version she edited and which I submitted.</p>

<p>I have some of my supplement essays as well if anybody would like to give feedback on those as well. These were not edited by anyone and were done solely by myself.</p>

<p>I'll put them all in one word file so you won't have to download more files than necessary.</p>

<p>PM me if you are willing to look at my essays. </p>

<p>Thanks and much appreciated!</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look. PM it over.</p>

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<p>Thanks for the feedback!</p>

<p>Anyone else care to read it?</p>

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<p>If you still are looking for help you can PM me.</p>

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<p>I’ll help if you still need, PM it over :)!</p>

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<p>I’ll look; shoot me a PM .</p>

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<p>I’ll give a read.</p>