<p>Hi, I recently visited Upenn during my winter break, and I have to say that the tour completely changed my perspective about my future. Previously, I was locked on solely going to Brown, but I simply fell in love with the campus and such at UPenn. Anyways, I'm currently applying for the pre-college program for H.S. students, and acceptance into this school could either make it or break it (in reference to my acceptance). I've had a series of bad luck lately with these types of programs, although I have been admitted into my fair share, and I can't put myself to writing this essay without help. So, any ideas as to write this? I'm thinking of using Benjamin Franklin since I find him extremely interesting, and yet it seems a bit off topic/ random in retrospect. Here's the question:
"Descrive a significant person or event in your life and how this has affected your decision to study a specific topic in college or pursue a specific career later in life."</p>
<p>My main fear is writing a corny essay. Any help on making an intellectually deep essay is appreciated. Thanks!</p>
<p>But it shows that you have a strong interest into the school, which does help. Also, just attending there can open up a myriad of opportunities of getting on a faculty member’s good side.</p>
<p>Frankly, I’m just going off what my tour guide told us based on her experiences. Nonetheless, this is steering from my op. Can you please ignore any misconception I may have and help me with my question then?</p>
<p>“BTW, attending the Pre-College Program has ZERO bearings on admission to Penn.”
I’m not sure I agree with this. I actually attended the pre-college program the summer before my senior year. I am now a freshman at Penn. While I don’t think doing the pre-college program was the sole reason I was accepted, I do think it helped because I did well and it showed that I was very interested in Penn. It also really helped me write my “Why Penn” essay. I know many other kids who did the pre-college program who are now attending Penn. Of course there were many kids that did not get in, but I think that doing this program helped us stand out.</p>
<p>To answer your question nvottennis, I think you should write about Benjamin Franklin if Franklin really has had an impact on your life. I have a feeling you wouldn’t be the first person to write about Franklin, so don’t write about Franklin just because thats what you think the adcom wants to hear. Answer the question honestly from the heart and you should be good.</p>
<p>And there’s my dilemma. The honest approach towards writing essays always seems to be my flaw in these types of applications. Sooo, I’m asking help on improving that part with perhaps advice on making it interesting also or the like.</p>
<p>Has Benjamin Franklin changed your perspective on life? If so, describe how. Be specific and to the point. Corny shouldn’t be a real issue if it’s true.</p>
<p>Not in an observable fashion. Most of the changes are ineffable, and I have an inner feeling telling me theres something else out there that does in a more tangible matter (as in I can actually describe it without writing mush)</p>
<p>i just submitted my app. i’m pretty confident in my essay but i’m pretty sure i screwed up the ec’s part. i didn’t really explain or go into too much depth with any of them and it’s not an amazingly long list either (maybe 20 items max). for each point, i just included leadership positions/accomplishments but not too much else. is there a problem with this/will it hurt my chances?</p>
<p>as for essay help, it doesn’t need to be about some earth-shattering or insanely profound topic. just think about something you’re extremely passionate about but isn’t necessarily trying to delve into complex inner machinations of the human mine (for me it was my hobby of sneaker collecting) and it will pretty much come naturally.</p>
<p>Hey! I actually took your words to heart, and I instead wrote about someone who I felt that I could relate to more closely. I think it worked out since I got accepted a week later. Thanks</p>
with perhaps advice on making it interesting also or the like.</p>