<p>Yeah so I live in NY and idk if my power will go out or not so if you guys can grade my essay plzz that would be great cuz Im too biased to do it myself.</p>
<p>Question: Is it always better to be original than to imitate or use the ideas of others?</p>
<p>Answer:
It is inevitable for people to use the ideas of others. This is due to the fact that the world has already been exposed to almost all ideas man can think of in this world. Therefore, it is more beneficial for people to use other's ideas and use the ideas by changing it a bit in order to make it their own. Examples such as the origin of Starbucks and the origin of Microsoft Corporation prove that it is better to imitate or use the ideas of others.</p>
<p>As demonstrated by the origin of Starbucks, some of the greatest creations can come from other people's ideas. In 1971, three friends wanted to open up their own business, but they had no idea what to do. But one day, one of their close friends, Howard Schultz, said that they should open a coffeehouse since he saw how successful they were in Italy. The group of friends listened to Howard and opened up a coffeehouse in Seattle. Ever since, the company has been rapidly expanding and Starbucks is now one of the most successful coffee companies in the world. Therefore, one company was able to change the face of coffee due to someone else's idea.</p>
<p>As seen by the origin of the Microsoft coroporation, it is better to use other's ideas if there aren't any way to be original. In 1978, Bill Gates met Steve Jobs while working for Apple and immediately became best friends. But, Bill was extremely interested in creating more efficent computers for public use. But at the time, Apple was the only maunfactor computers in the world. Therefore, Bill Gates took the blueprints of the Apple computer, alter the design, made the design his own, and started his own company. Although it ruined Bill Gates' friendship with Steve Jobs, Bill's company quickly expanded and Bill Gates became the 1st billionaire as a result of his extremely successful corporation.</p>
<p>Based on the origin of Starbucks and Microsoft, it is indeed a fact that there are benefits to using other's ideas since the world can greatly benefit from the use of the ideas as a result.</p>
<p>I would recommend using a stronger lead in. You sort of go right to addressing the prompt. Good amount of detail. Vocabulary isn’t terribly strong, to be honest. Thesis needs a little more to beef it up.</p>
<p>Look at how you start the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs. They begin way too similarly. Also, your conclusion simply restates the thesis. Make your conclusion something intellectual. For example “Humans must continue to feed off the ideas of others in order to advance as a whole; ideas build off of each other.” </p>
<p>I do not want to put you down but this is an 8, maybe a 9 at best.</p>
<p>Please grade this?
Is censorship sometimes justified?
Censorship is sometimes justified, especially when the topic at hand is gratuitous or detrimental to the government or one’s health. Weeding out the good from the bad is essential in our country. The Alien and Sedition Acts of 1789 is documented roof written and passed by the President that censorship is sometimes justified. Likewise, the Red Scare of Communists in America in the 1920’s proves my view point to be pervasive. Another example of justified censorship is the King censoring the bourgeoisie during the French Revolution.
John Adams passed a series of laws that censored Americans near the turn of the 18th century. At the time, the French Revolution caused political uproars to occur in the states. The Federal Government felt it was in their power to pass any legislature that prevented these uproars from occurring. Under the Elastic Clause in the United States Constitution anything that is deemed “necessary and proper” to maintain the general welfare of the Union could be passed into a law. Weeding out the revels allowed a young to country to sustain its fresh foundation and prosper. Censorship was in a sense deemed constitutional in 1789; therefore, it was justified by law.
In the early 1920’s the communistic wave swept across the nation. Jay Edgar Hoover, eventual head of the FBI, led the search for these communistic people and sought to destroy and deport them After one person was deported many more deportees came and the eventual “communist witch hunt” was born. Joseph McCarthy accused many high ranking officials of communistic beliefs and as a result communism was in a sense “illegal”. Censorship once again proved to be necessary and proper as the communist scare was silenced by the FBI and organizations alike as it was the only way to weed out the communists from the capitalists. The former were spreading their ideas, and this needed to be stopped especially in a capitalist country.
During the French Revolution the King strictly enforced censorship on the bourgeoisie. As a result, many uprisings were initially silenced. It was in fact justified for the King to stop the rebels. From the King’s perspective the middle class was simply complaining, which justified the censorship. If censorship prevailed the bloodiest revolution would have been nonexistent, which was positive for the clergy, but negative for the bourgeoisie.
Censorship is a controversial topic that can be justifiable. From Louis XVI’s point of view, censorship was the only option to silence the cries of the middle class. In 1789 John Adams thought the only way to prevent a revolution from occurring in the United States was to hush the people who spoke out against the neophyte republic. The Red Scare completely justified censorship of communistic people in America because a capitalistic country must back capitalism. Throughout history censorship has indeed been justified, and will continue to be justified in the future.</p>
