<p>Hey guys, I don't know which sub-branch of the forum to post this under, but here goes. Can you guys please rate my essay for Emory. I feel like I should scrap it and start anew because this essay isn't "personal" enough. Both of the teachers who looked over it said it was "good." Here it is: </p>
<p>Essay Option 1
Emory University welcomes first-year students with two distinct options to begin their liberal arts education: the research-infused Emory College or the smaller, experiential learning Oxford College. If you could create an academic course that is in the Emory University spirit of collaboration, creativity, entrepreneurship and inquiry, what would it be? What impact would the course have on you and your classmates’ educational experience? (500 word limit) </p>
<p>“The best way to predict the future is to create it,” says Peter Drucker, the man who single-handedly designed the modus operandi of the modern corporation. My academic course would follow Drucker’s ideas, allowing students to create their own future through a personalized course of study at Emory University. The students who enroll in my course at Emory will decide for themselves exactly which classes they want to take, giving them more freedom than if they chose a more linear, pre-decided route. Since no two students have like interests and passions, my course would let them create a schedule that would allow them to benefit from Emory’s prestigious campus in a way that fulfills their specific interests the most. For example, a student interested in medicine could take neuroscience classes taught by Assistant Professor and CNN Chief Medical Correspondent Dr. Sanjay Gupta, while one interested in world affairs could immerse himself in the modern-day humanitarian issues discussed in former President Jimmy Carter’s class. Although my course allows freedom, there are still some requirements. Incoming freshman students will be required to take one senior-level course in a major they’re interested in. Going straight into a senior-level course will allow the student to experience what he is passionate about at an advanced level, giving him (or her) a wider experience in that particular subject as opposed to starting out from the introductory-level freshman courses and working his way up. This gives the student a glimpse of the advanced-level learning that he will soon partake in at his particular field, which will motivate him to study through his introductory courses. With this personalized academic course, our creativity will flourish as we design our own futures, in the order we deem best. This method of learning will also teach responsibility to the college freshman, as he will have to deal with the consequences of his actions if he selects a course he finds he no longer likes by “sticking it out” for the rest of the semester. My academic course would also require students to maximize time spent with professors, in order to give students time to ask questions and learn through a personalized conversation, which can supplement the standard lecture. Students can also collaborate to design courses with one another; for example, a group of students who decide they want to study the pre-medical sciences can all design synchronized courses so that they can ask each other for help if the need arises as well as have the opportunity to learn as a group. I hold dear the belief that if students study something that they are naturally passionate about, learning will come easily. I believe than an easy way to foster the love of learning is to learn what you love, and my course will allow my fellow students and me to do just that.</p>
<p>Any and all feedback is welcome! Thank you guys so much!</p>